Friday belly-dancing,
we whipped-
cream-screamed; in
a what-if-dreamed de-
lighted darkness-holler
candle-lighted-giggling
si-i-i-i-gh
oily mess-mass-
aged &
sweetly sweated
lusty ex/stacied
a-moaned ent/wined…
or no.
BUT
we pil(low)talked
shy of webbed-toe-tick-(tock)-
ling we unwrapped
to lone/li(o)ness
Parcel #7 by Betty Goodwin
I had to do a second entry for De’s prompt at dVerse MTB on enjambment. I also link this to Izy’s out of standard prompt at toads, alas a thing that doesn’t happen.
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November 5, 2015
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Ha ha ha. I freaking love this. I’m so totally grinning from ear to ear. 🙂
I actually just suggested to Shay the other day that she might want to write a belly-dancing poem, and here you’ve done it for me instead.
These are my faves:
“cream-screamed”
“candle-lighted-giggling
si-i-i-i-gh
oily mess-mass-”
Big-time kudos for these gnarly word-splits, which I’ve never even considered: “ex/stacied” and “ent/wined.”
So much love for all your cleverness in the last four lines. I love the back and forth. This happened, no it didn’t, but maybe. LOL. That’s what you get when you hook up with a lioness, I guess.
Your opening totally made me think of this song:
Can you belly dance to that? LOL.
Maybe more like this 🙂
Ha, Bjorn, I like this one better than your first. You really got into that word play that makes enjambment fun. I enjoyed the ‘cream-screamed’ and then the ‘ex-stacied’ encounter ending in the ‘lone/li(o)ness.’ Really it is fun to just play with words on occasion, isn’t it??
I love the unwrapping from whipped cream scream to lone/li(o)ness ~ I am thinking of doing another one, ha ~
Quite a clever & fun jambing sequence here 😀 enjoyed this 🙂
Love love LOVE that drawn out sigh. You are channelling E.E. here…and OH! This:
“a what-if-dreamed de”
Whether that was for me or not, it sure makes me smile. 🙂
Love both dear Björn – this one rather ex
citing!
Anna :o]
This was just so much madness to love here. How fun and free. I like this better than the first because it made me grin hugely with delight. And….congrats on the book, the collaboration with other writers, the party to come….have much fun. We d’Verse folk can only be there with you in spirit. Wish I could be there to see you do a belly dance!
“lusty ex/stacied
a-moaned ent/wined…
or no.”
sheer gen/ius.
sensuously fun — the layout and messy orthography enhanced the playful chaos and mature love.
Fantastic. The way you drew out the enjoyment with the enjambment is perfect!
I love the energy in this and the sweat!! Plus…I see a lioness in the closing? Either way, I love it!
whew! good one. like the lone/li(o)ness at the end
Sigh, yes the bellydancing and whip cream screams often get overlooked for softer pillow talk. This one is very clever and fun Bjorn! Thanks for posting to the out of standard!
Fascinating form.
There seems to me to be a natural break down or breaking apart in relationships over time and your form and content epitomises that well here.
Love the form. A beautiful package like a relationship loses its glitter when the ribbons are removed.
luv the wrap arounds and the word play
much love…
~~ they don’t come much better than this!!
enjambment: new to me (thanks, once again, for the edification) Very cool – I must try it one day.