Close to parting

Our slow-dance delivered us
lazily, but with utmost care
closer, closer
to the precipice of parting,
so when you simply
delivered me a passive punch,
I only felt relief
that you gifted me goodbye,
relieving me of blame
to be the first to leave.

States of Mind: The Farewells
Umberto Boccioni

Today we are writing Quadrilles at dVerse with De and the word to use is punch.

September 19, 2022

22 responses to “Close to parting

  1. Well, I don’t know if I should have gotten the giggles from this, (such an occasion), but I did. Your whole ending was a punch. I always enjoy the bite at the end of your poems. Nicely done.

    Pat

  2. An interesting approach, Björn, and what a quadrille! I love the alliterative ‘closer to the precipice of parting’ and ‘passive punch’.

  3. “He had it coming to him,” I love that song from “Chicago”. She should have shot him (I’m from Texas, we can do that, self defense.)
    ..

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