Grey,
we’re grey, betrayed
away slips days
away our life’s astray
we walk
dismayed in clay
while weighed
with words unsaid,
Again it’s grey,
it’s grey today
away away
we’re waylaid
we stray
delayed
surveyed
unpaid
we’re played
delayed we wait
we wail a while
we pray to die.

Today it’s OLN at dVerse and Ingrid hosts. I simply started to write this from the perspective of grey and decided to play with rhymes.
March 31, 2022
Well, it certainly came out interesting; good old grey/gray. It’s a good read.
Despondency does not need explaining…the space around your sparse words is as powerful as the words themselves…and is part of the words. Masterful.
I like the way this reads like a dance, or danse macabre, perhaps…
Hi Bjorn, seems like I hit the bullseye going for it today… The paradox here is acute and drawn with originality. The contrast between light jollity at play here and the darkness of the theme is both striking and effective – albeit a little troubling… Perfect for our time right now, methinks. As ever, a very fresh and musical write. Regards…
I can imagine children reciting this rhyme!
Danse macabre….powerfully writ ten
The underlying melancholy contrasts beautifully with the seemingly easy rhyming.
Hooray, hooray I say.
The sadness of grey, literal and metaphorical, comes through.
I keep thinking I should re-watch The Seventh Seal one of these days. All I remember is the knight and Death playing chess.
Enjoyed this Bjorn, it trips along from rhyme to rhyme!
JIM
Much of the time has this monochromatic stain to it these days. Color has a hard time popping out.
Interesting Björn. Though those 2 ending lines tore the fun out and sent me back to pondering present day Ukraine.
Much💜love
Yes it is gray here today. I wonder if it is gray everywhere. No, it can’t be!!! Let’s not die!!! Chase the sun!
I sense a bit of Purgatory here.
Nicely done, Bjorn.
Trying to sustain light in sustained grey isn’t easy.
I feel the grey deep to my soul today Bjorn. Yours was the perfect poem for me!
Its certainly a danse macarbre! Love it….
The grey has taken over…at least for awhile. i feel your monochrome mood, Bjorn!