How you, this blue
this satin surface, smooth
your skin, your youth;
how you, us two,
with kiss of kelp beneath
the blue, our sheet;
how you, this hue
of priceless gems, warm
your lips, your arms
how you, this view
this silent water. mild
let’s dive, be wild.
For Poetics Tuesday we revisit the prompt by Sarah on Fay Collins at dVerse who sadly has passed away in cancer since. Let this be a place to write joyful poetry.
November 23, 2021
How lovely,Björn -I particularly like the ending -the wildness beneath the calm surface.
This is breathtakingly beautiful! I love the “kelp beneath the blue.” 💝💝
I love the word play with all those ‘ooh’ sounds: adds to the sensual nature of the poem. Some great escapism at this time of year!
yes the underlying sensuality, the innuendo appeals … well done young man!
Love this, “with kiss of kelp beneath the blue, our sheet” 🌶🌶🌶
The ending is quite provocative as well, that ocean is calling me!!
I think children would love skipping rope to this rhyme!
Bjorn, Delightful the bathing of blue in word and rhyme and meter that makes the color positively glow with the sensual invitation and wild ebullience of a lover’s passion. Pax, Dora
This was my second choice, but your take is superb. The form makes it a ballad, a sea shanty. The rhyme scheme rolls along like a corps of waves pounding our senses. I saw a sunken pirate ship beneath that cyan blue.
You have gone into the depth to pull that powerful, intoxicating blue into your words, well done…
I loved your metaphor of climbing… maybe it’s what we all do without even knowing why… and much like Sysiphos we just climb again when we fall.
Wonderful passion herein Bjorn — carefree, great abandon. 🙂 My muse remains angry…😡
Your words of passion for another remind us how sensual the color blue can be.
Delightful kelp kisses, and the lure of the poem, very sensual like the sea. Wonderful, Björn.
Perfect!! Love this 💜
you took me to the sea with your poem. tha nk you its a good place to be on thesse dark mornings
The rhythm of this is wonderful and like how the lines pin us in a place to embrace your vision
I echo others here – the repetition and rhythm of this is so lovely.
You echo Fay’s love of the colour blue.
Nice poem! The imagery used here is great, and the rhyme adds a great finish to it. 😀
Inviting in all ways. (K)
Very stirring yet peaceful! Love it!
interesting that we both pulled sheet from this painting. kelp, too.
yours has a positive flair, a frolic to it, which I much admire ~
delighted to see that we pick the same photo and how your rhymes and rhythm lilt like how the waves do!!
Light and lovely feel to the language here, and a form which gives it all a sense of uniqueness. Like it very much.
How lovely! I love the rhyme and flow of this, dipping in and out.
We picked the same painting, and there was a similar feel to our poems.
Yes, yes, let’s be wild!