Meeting for breakfast at their restaurant was a bittersweet but silent end. The waitress, Dolly, greeted them with her usual smile and they found their table by the window.
“I got the paper to sign from my solicitor,” said Geoff.
“Fine,” she said “but at least let us take some coffee first”
Looking at the spring flowers outside they drank their Java in familiar silence. When Geoff’s face went crimson, and he grasped for air, she screamed:
“Call 911, it must be his heart”
She managed a quick nod to Dolly before the ambulance came.
Today Rochelle celebrates her 8th year hosting Friday Fictioneers, and for me this was my third time joining. This is what I wrote back then, and some of you might still recognize the story.
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October 21, 2020
Ouch. This must be the week for tragic endings. Great write.
I am sure there will be a lot of those… the body count was much higher at dVerse when I started to write.
Murder most foul! I didn’t suspect a thing 🙂
Conspiracy as well… but I guess that’s a consequence of a prenup-
Why do I have this nagging suspicion that there’s more than Java in his cup? Nicely set up.
I think that it was the sugar
I hope they used a poison that decays quickly before the pathologists get to the body
Intrigued to know how involved Dolly was – and if, 8 years later, they got away with it! 🙂
They do say sugar is poison.
Conspiracy theory…Dolly is in!
Great story, Bjorn and good job packing so much in there. With these 100-word ones, it’s all about making the subtext do the heavy lifting. That Dolly is a tricky one.
I hope Dolly is a very very good friend.
Wow. On my first quick read, I thought: oh, heart attack. He’s about to sign divorce papers and it got to him. Second read: notice the title, notice the second nod to Dolly. Oh! So well done, Bjorn!
A breakup just like my story, but much more permanent! Shame on Dolly for taking sides…
If I was Dolly, I am not sure if I could trust her. Clearly the divorce was not in her favour.
Perfectly set up. And the complicit waitress was a complete surprise. Well done.
Wow, I wasn’t expecting that. They really set the poor guy up, didn’t they? Great take on the photo prompt.
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I hope she gave Dolly a sizeable gratuity!
Oh dear! Dolly and her in cahoots! Bad women… Wondering how much he deserved that… Well done keeping us feeling all relaxed till the end!
i didn’t expect what was coming and neither did i. i suspect dolly was in it all along.
Classic Friday Fictioneers story, Bjorn. Carefully targeted murder and mayhem!
Treachery is afoot! Nice use of the subtle nod.
Maybe Dolly is the reason the papers are being signed. He had no idea what was coming.
Oh no! Somehow I have a feeling he had this coming.
Bittersweet and silent indeed. The sense of familiarity and acceptance comes through strongly.
Ooooooo that nod. Nefarious plans afoot methinks
Coffee is a killer 😀
p.s. I want that froggy cup (minus coffee and “sugar” though)