When darkness tiptoes
gently — hiding from
the brightness
of a drowsy moon.
Open up
your lips
and sip
the night
from skin
and flesh;
let night
be pillow;
drown again,
fall back
to sleep.
When shadows walk
through chambers;
dream lesser —
darker still.
The Dream by Odilon Redon
Today it’s Quadrille again at dVerse. Mish hosts and the word is sip. To participate write a poem in exactly 44 words excluding the title and remember to include the word sip somewhere in the poem.
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February 25, 2019
I love this. Great quad word, too.
Thank you… sip also is great to rhyme with…
Maybe it should have been moonsip
“Trip,” “drip,” “hip.” Yes, it IS a great word to rhyme with. I’m sure all the contributions will be wonderful. I look forward to reading.
I really like the shape of this quadrille, Björn, and the way it wriggles down the page! I love the drowsy moon and the phrase ‘sip the night from skin and flesh’.
I wanted to mimic the sense of wakening up at night and then going back to sleep again.
“sip the night from from skin and flesh” . . . oooooh, yes!
And I love the shape of this…as if the words themselves are tiptoeing across the page 🙂
oh to sip the night from *that* cup! wonderful!
“open up your lips and sip the night” – gorgeous. Works on so mnay levels.
Another Odilon Redon! That’s the third in less than a week. I like your night sipping.
I absolutely love this! ❤️ The tone, the mood and shape of this quadrille is like stepping into a dream itself. 😀 Stunning, Bjorn.
I love the imagery at the start especially. Drowsy moon is partially wonderful.
Well done! I love the feeling of going in and out of sleep.
On this line: and sip
the night
from skin
and flesh;
Perhaps sip the (moon) glow from skin and flesh? Just a thought!
I love the brightness of a drowsy moon!
darkness tiptoeing gently, hiding from the moon sets a lovely tone, then yes i see the dreamer wakes then gives reins to deep sleep where other worlds exist. magical!
Hypnogogic brilliance, brother. I, too, ninth to say, was hooked by sipping the night,. and the wonderful shaping of the lines.
I specially love the form and sensual sip in the second stanza. I appreciate the cycle of sleeping and waking and sleeping again in darkness.
Love it!!!! Drifting in and out of the dreamscape…
Superbly worded, as always, and cleverly presented as well.
I love the shape and flow of this one.
Sipping the night…how wonderful that is and I like the image of night tiptoeing. This lulling poem might have helped me battle sleeplessness last night with howling winds reported of up to 72 km./hr.
Love the spiral you created in the shape of your quadrille, falling, falling……zzzz
Dark and dreamy!
Beautiful words conveys such imagery. Thanks for sharing.
The ladder of words up from sleep and thier musical sound putting us back to sleep again was terrific!
I read this as a charming description of a midnight tryst… and I like the ascent and descent of the form Björn.
I like the ethereal, dreamy quality of the flowing lines and especially the “drowsy moon”.
Nicely done. Worthy of a second and third read.
I like the thought of sipping the night and falling back to sleep.
I love the imagery in your poem, especially ‘let night be pillow’ 🙂
Absolutely beautiful-word and form.
This is beautiful. I love the sensuous drape of it.
Also love:
“sip the night from from skin and flesh”
And the whole thing. Dreams are extracted from our own body, a sensory experience we build from our own flesh, so beautifully done, alpha delta rem.
You have captured the mystical sense of those moonlit nights and all the mysteries they want us to explore in sense and dream.
I love the poem and I adore Redon! Thank you for sharing 🙂