The real change

“You’ve changed, you say” Leyla put her hands on her hips, raised her left eyebrow staring at Julian.

“Yes… I’ve come to ask forgiveness… I acted wrong,” he couldn’t meet her flint-hard eyes.

“Forgiveness… after what you did?… Time might flow like river-water, but beside a waterfall it still looks much the same.”

“But… my life is desert… just say yes.”

“Then may you die of thirst! — I’ll never forgive you!”

“But… I’ll do anything… don’t you remember… how it was… before I mean”.

“… before you raped me.”.

Julian left — silently.

Leyla’s heart stopped racing, he had changed.

© Dale Rogerson

I couldn’t think of anything else than time flowing when I saw the beautiful picture, but sometimes time cannot heal. This time I thought I write it mostly in dialogue.

Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful way to improve your writing. Six years for and still going on… thank you Rochelle for keeping it up.

November 21, 2018

63 responses to “The real change

  1. Some criminals are certainly sicker than others. I recently read Our Kind of Cruelty: A Novel, by Araminta Hall, and the attitude of dear Julian, here, reminds of how the protagonist of that novel thinks. He, too, is delusional all the way to the end. And the female lead in the novel is a disturbed by it as your character is.

    Fantastic dialogue, Björn.

  2. kaykuala

    One can’t help but sympathize with those who had to put up with such elements. A serious matter he’s changed but wonder if it is accompanied with remorse!


  3. The twist at the end was intense. No matter how he has changed, too much damage has been done. Forgiveness is one thing, reconciliation is another. I sincerely enjoyed the dialogue.

  4. Your tense dialogue conveys so much feeling – anger, mistrust, betrayal, pleading. A sombre subject. I wouldn’t trust him to change at all – he doesn’t get it, does he ?

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