The moment when you rush,
with muscles pumping
sweating and with blood
taste in your mouth
when you are strong
and you are fast
and when the path is smooth
and to the beat of footfalls
you know that you are winning.
That moment just before
you stumble, fall and,
twist your knee,
is like your smile before
we shared a cup of coffee
and I said farewell.
Greek vase with runners
Shay want’s us to think about almost the end at toads. We are almost at the end of the April challenge, I missed out in the beginning but hope to reach 30 poems tomorrow. This is number 27.
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April 29, 2018
Björn Rudbergs writings 
“is like her smile before
she says farewell”
Genius ending.
Oh I just updated the ending a bit…
Ha ha ha. That is hilarious.
Another dirty trick from the Great Humorist In The Sky. Love the vase and the song. I hadn’t heard it before. Love the Spanish feel.
It was you who reminded me of another Dylan song about the moment just before it happened….
Farewells seem always sad for someone, if not for all.
I love your analogy. Yes, the farewells can be fearsome 🙂
You set up the comparison so well, the end came as a surprise!
wonderful comparison you led us down one path in the first stanza and then changed direction…. I really liked this
Luv the build up to that surprise end. Nice.
Much love…
A cosmic banana slip moment, and then …. well, you can never be sure when the lightning of the moment will strike, or who it will hit first – or how a revelation will unfold –
definitely a worthwhile ending – the last line surely makes all the world of difference here ….
Oh, that smile before the farewell. Captured.
I can’t figure the “you” in the penultimate line. Is there a third in this game of love?
Oh yes… you don’t want a third person there… I will update this.
Very graphic! I am thinking the original ending (as revealed by Shawna’s comment) was more powerful.
I like the analogy. I also like the revised ending better than the original.
I enjoyed the thoughtful and thought provoking direction that you went in, with the prompt.
So far and yet so close. Kind of what I am with my poetry challenge 🙂
I love these lines, Bjorn:
‘That moment just before
you stumble, fall and,
twist your knee,
is like her smile before
you shared a cup of coffee
and I said farewell’
and thanks for the song, one of my favourites by Dylan..