A button bold anti-
cipated stiff.
Streams in stars and silence.
It’s important even if
a darkly tear of more
(or evidence of welcomes).
Of broken laps, bones
and in its laughter thin.
Is evermore; is sullen said.
No or never think unpaid
stated stale (if frowned upon)
Yet in sinking, yes
and maybe so —
she inhales its darkness asking;
“Is it done or less?”
But therein lies its sighs unsated
Paul hosts dVersetonight and want us to throw grammar overboard with inspiration from Gertrude Stein and ee cummings. Join us from 3PM EST.
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October 3, 2017
Lovely poem, and unique artwork that looks like a honeybee, to me, at least. Enjoyed this one.
Might be one of my favorites by you!!
You soar in the absurdist rarified air, brother; really got me ramped up to tackle pummeling grammar, and letting loose the dogs of madness. I like your lines /yet in sinking, yes/and maybe so/.
I am so happy to read this. There is a sense of words existing between the words here.I think you pulled out a masterpiece Bjorn.
I think there are different ways to do this… but I agree it’s a sense of missing a word here or there.
What a great poem with a brilliant title, Bjorn! I love the rhyming of ‘stiff’ and ‘if’.
I picked the button from the title of Gertrude Stein’s book…
Will you be sewing it back on?
Too tender for me 🙂
A clever poem, that completely defeats me 🙂 I’m having trouble with all of tonight’s poems. I’m too hidebound probably.
A delightful mish-mash of maybe, with which of interest I read.
“she inhales its darkness” This is spot-on realism — grammar be damned — and we all know what it feels like… or will before it’s all over.
The unsaid is the most powerful part(s). This is really grand – need to read it again.
Haha..You threw me overboard along with the grammar! But the whole thing sounds lovely and I love the bee!
I absolutely adore the thought of a button going unsated because he can’t get into that hole. 🙂
So I read this as being about a guy paying a prostitute for services. At the end, I hear her asking if he’s done or if he has more deviance in mind.
Lies its size unsated … he has a big penis, and he has more he wants to do with it. :X
But I’m probably misreading.
Chicote = a whip.
“a darkly tear of more” … He’s beating her.
This button is definitely not tender. It’s stiff, lies in darkness and seems unsated. Am I warm?
Very much so…
Great!
Your Bjorn are a master of craftsmanship in wordage. My favorite poem by you today. 🙂
P.S. I posted a link to a poem I posted today…breaking the rules in grammar huh?
This prompt was meant for you Charley… I will be right over.
It was???? Then I should have been the host of this event? 🙂 Thank you so much my friend. I love you. 🙂
Ha.. Just kidding there are only those who find a prompt like this perfect and others find it extremely challenging.
I’m glad frank told me about this today…otherwise I would have missed out. 🙂
P.S. Don’t forget to give me a heads up about Open link night. 🙂
That’s tomorrow… every second Thursday
🙂 This week is getting better and better already. 🙂
“Of broken laps, bones
and in its laughter thin.”
Love the almost awkwardness of these lines.
I wonder about that button…..loved the opening lines, i think it has got more to say, and the art work given…..
This was an interesting challenge by Paul. I suspect you’ve nailed it here…,much more to his intent than what I did. I love the actual sound of the title. I can kind of roll it around on my tongue…and it sparks the interest.