A button bold anti-
cipated stiff.
Streams in stars and silence.
It’s important even if
a darkly tear of more
(or evidence of welcomes).
Of broken laps, bones
and in its laughter thin.
Is evermore; is sullen said.
No or never think unpaid
stated stale (if frowned upon)
Yet in sinking, yes
and maybe so —
she inhales its darkness asking;
“Is it done or less?”
But therein lies its sighs unsated
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Paul hosts dVersetonight and want us to throw grammar overboard with inspiration from Gertrude Stein and ee cummings. Join us from 3PM EST.
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October 3, 2017
Lovely poem, and unique artwork that looks like a honeybee, to me, at least. Enjoyed this one.
Might be one of my favorites by you!!
You soar in the absurdist rarified air, brother; really got me ramped up to tackle pummeling grammar, and letting loose the dogs of madness. I like your lines /yet in sinking, yes/and maybe so/.
I am so happy to read this. There is a sense of words existing between the words here.I think you pulled out a masterpiece Bjorn.
I think there are different ways to do this… but I agree it’s a sense of missing a word here or there.
What a great poem with a brilliant title, Bjorn! I love the rhyming of ‘stiff’ and ‘if’.
I picked the button from the title of Gertrude Stein’s book…
Will you be sewing it back on?
Too tender for me 🙂
A clever poem, that completely defeats me 🙂 I’m having trouble with all of tonight’s poems. I’m too hidebound probably.
A delightful mish-mash of maybe, with which of interest I read.
“she inhales its darkness” This is spot-on realism — grammar be damned — and we all know what it feels like… or will before it’s all over.
The unsaid is the most powerful part(s). This is really grand – need to read it again.
Haha..You threw me overboard along with the grammar! But the whole thing sounds lovely and I love the bee!
I absolutely adore the thought of a button going unsated because he can’t get into that hole. 🙂
So I read this as being about a guy paying a prostitute for services. At the end, I hear her asking if he’s done or if he has more deviance in mind.
Lies its size unsated … he has a big penis, and he has more he wants to do with it. :X
But I’m probably misreading.
Chicote = a whip.
“a darkly tear of more” … He’s beating her.
This button is definitely not tender. It’s stiff, lies in darkness and seems unsated. Am I warm?
Very much so…
Great!
Your Bjorn are a master of craftsmanship in wordage. My favorite poem by you today. 🙂
P.S. I posted a link to a poem I posted today…breaking the rules in grammar huh?
This prompt was meant for you Charley… I will be right over.
It was???? Then I should have been the host of this event? 🙂 Thank you so much my friend. I love you. 🙂
Ha.. Just kidding there are only those who find a prompt like this perfect and others find it extremely challenging.
I’m glad frank told me about this today…otherwise I would have missed out. 🙂
P.S. Don’t forget to give me a heads up about Open link night. 🙂
That’s tomorrow… every second Thursday
🙂 This week is getting better and better already. 🙂
“Of broken laps, bones
and in its laughter thin.”
Love the almost awkwardness of these lines.
I wonder about that button…..loved the opening lines, i think it has got more to say, and the art work given…..
This was an interesting challenge by Paul. I suspect you’ve nailed it here…,much more to his intent than what I did. I love the actual sound of the title. I can kind of roll it around on my tongue…and it sparks the interest.