Price of a penthouse

Jobless and foreclosure. Homeless. It’s been merciless and quick.
Once a rock starts rolling it’s hard to stop. But when it reached the bottom all went quiet.

Friends may cease to call, but they had kept united.

Jason smiled at Carol as he lit the candles.
They had stars as ceiling and on the gas-stove there was stew of rabbit.

“Do you miss our penthouse?”, Jason asked.

Carol answered with questions:

“Do you miss 5 AM alarm clocks, burning midnight oil or the weekend spreadsheets?”

“No.” shuddered Jason.

She leaned against his chest. Sighing.

“I don’t miss the penthouse either.”

© Jan Wayne Fields

A picture that lights desire of a simpler life. How about you, do you think we pay a price that’s way to steep for things we do not really need?

I hope to make my rounds a bit earlier this week, apologies for late returns last week.

Friday Fictioneers is a community of bloggers writing different 100 word stories to the same picture every week. Rochelle set the example and keep us all in order. Why don’t you try it yourself?



August 23, 2017

53 responses to “Price of a penthouse

  1. A lovely story. To turn the misfortune of redundancy into such a positive experience is a great plot, and asks the question “Wouldn’t YOU rather be living a simpler and less stressed life?”

  2. Yes… once we have all that stuff, we have to keep working harder to keep said stuff then have no time to enjoy it. Now I have George Carlin’s monologue on my mind!

  3. You are a wonderful storyteller, Björn! With just a few sentences you set the entire arc of these two lives — and left me wondering how I might simplify mine. (Though I’ll never have a penthouse, and very much hope to never be homeless …)
    Beautiful writing!

  4. My husband and I just sold off everything, bought a second hand motor home and plan to reinvent our lives. And, no, we don’t miss the mansion on the hill overlooking the city with all its bills and taxes and the rat race of life. We are rediscovering each other under the stars, amongst the pines, and eventually in ever-changing landscapes.

  5. We been rich and we been poor. When poor (like right now) we find a lot more time to be together and we enjoy that immensely. Don’t get me wrong, you need money to buy food and basics. But money does not buy happiness.

  6. Life is so much more pleasurable without the stress-factor .Also, I like the positive attitude of your characters .
    Great story , Bjorn.

  7. A very appropo story in today’s world. When we lost everything and were homeless, we curled on a blanket beneath the stars, hugged each other, and were just happy to have each other. Our friends and family abandoned us. Things are a little better now, we have an apartment, and recently got a bed and a few pieces of furniture. It’s no where near where we were, but we have what’s important – each other, food, shelter.

  8. Dear Björn,

    You give us a lot to think about in this seemingly simple story. It looks like they’ve discovered what’s really important. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  9. Thought provoking, story and question. They sure go from one extreme to the other, don’t they? I don’t think it has to be that extreme but living a simpler life, getting back in touch with things that count in the end, would do many of us a lot of good. I try to live simple, but with creature comforts.

  10. Good for them! You’re about the first one to make camping look appealing…in a way. 🤔
    I don’t want a penthouse, but this is Saskatchewan with a week of minus 40 in Dec.
    Chipping through a metre of ice to draw the bathwater has no appeal. 😥

  11. It didn’t take me long to tire of living in town. However, I do still prefer four solid walls, running water, and electricity. A weekend without those things makes me appreciate them more.

  12. I’m so glad they’ve stuck together, that their troubles haven’t driven them apart. They might just need a roof over their heads once winter comes though 🙂 Lovely tale Bjorn

  13. one of my favorite quotes is: if it’s not to your liking, change your liking. but, hopefully, it’s only a temporary situation for them.

  14. Truly Bjorn. It’s a busy & materialistic world. But, when we are away from spreadsheets & penthouses, we realize the worth of simple life & happiness

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