It’s like snow in April
how the orchard cries
when shedding petals
to a night of frost
wasted
like the one-night stand
with someone
you had hoped to marry.
Ashes by Edvard Munch
You never know where a prompt will take you. Magaly wrote about the early bloom that often succumb to frost at toads.
A one night stand that leaves behind nothing but sorrow a disease. Perfect description, Bjorn.
WOW! I love where this prompt took you. A fantastic simile.
This is an excellent piece. I honestly think shorter poems are more powerful.
You really caught my attention with
“like the one-night stand
with someone
you had hoped to marry.”
Nicely done, Björn.
Wow! This one strikes the very spot that hurts the most – Perfect. Perfect painting too.
ha!
My goodness this is good!!❤️
Ah yes, another instance of something not coming to fruition.
Beautiful words and imagery. It’s been snowing blossom in the breeze these past few days.
Terrifically clever. Love the Munch. Thanks. k.
The ‘one night stand ‘ grabs attention
the fleeing lover could have stayed
That’s how they do it in the song
first a fleeting hint of goodbye
I’ll read up on space time physics, I’m okay with four, or more dimensions. Cordinates x, y z, and time. Time seems to be corresponding with place. (“Name the time and place.”)
Good prompt, Bjorn. Thank you.
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Very clever metaphor. You really drove home that feeling of betrayal and heartache.
Yes, clever metaphor. Freezing temperatures are definitely a one night stand.
‘Shedding petals to a night of frost’ – Wow! This is clever.