Beneath the canopy
is grass
and daisy words.
And there are eyes
in eyes
forget-me-nots
and hand in hand
cause she is her
and blood grape sun,
a shared champagne
a blackbird melody
and butterflies
beneath the canopy.
Lunch under the canopy by Claude Monet
Today I host dVerse MTB and we continue the series on art movements. Today we have come to impressionism and I want you to paint in words like an impressionist. I will give you some background on how to paint as an impressionist. Your challenge is to use that guideline with words.
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March 16, 2017
Björn Rudbergs writings 
“eyes in eyes”, blackbird melody, a grape sun…a sweet yet voluptuous poem. Who would not like to go on a picnic like that?
Love the “daisy words.”
Beautiful imagery — especially the blood grape sun. I LOVE this prompt! 🙂
“blood grape sun” … gorgeous
Your piece is grand, so illustrative of the impressionist painting. When we do this prompt, I always get kind of lost, but then get caught up in a creative wave of words; smile.
This is amazing. it is amazing how so far we Pubsters have chosen Monet as our inspiration and yet, you have magnified and improved upon his works. Almost a Quadrille in length, this poem says much in little space. I love every line in this gorgeous poem.
As I once said in a comment to you… I think haiku can be seen a bit like an impressionist painting…
Yes it can. I totally agree.
Your brush certainly was loaded with colour today, Bjorn! I love ‘daisy words’ and ‘eyes / in eyes / forget-me-nots’! You’ve taken the chill out of the air!
Nice description of what’s beneath the canopy sandwiched between the first and last lines. I liked the hand in hand and eyes in eyes.
What a beautiful”painting” you have created with your words.
I like the thought of haiku being like an impressionistic painting! Your poem beautifully presents visual and sensory perception.
wow…such finesse…nice use of list form….brush strokes of real depth…i loved Daisy Words and blood grape sun.
I love daisy words and blood grape sun too ~ Love the over-all effect Bjorn ~
Daisy words works so well (as others have noted). And the way the lines just fall on your canvas evoke impressionism for me.
Glad you remembered the blackbirds 🙂
Thank you for hosting Monet and the choice of that particular painting – being a poet yourself and also providing poetic inspiration for others – two wonderful gifts in one! Brush strokes was a wonderful guideline, which I see you have followed yourself….
the words painted a little magical kingdom hidden from the world – with violet hues in my mind
A lovely wordpainting, Bjorn….and so romantic!
daisy words and forget-me-nots, just pluck my heartstrings..
Excellent prompt and excellent poem. Loved how warm it feels.
“And there are eyes
in eyes”
oh how beautiful. ❤
I love the fragments of images, and how they form a whole.
There are lots of goings-on beneath the canopy not seen by human eyes! And perhaps a little ticklish!
Hank
Dreaming words and the painting – wonderful!
I love the framing of the poem with “beneath the canopy” and “daisy words” are wonderful.
It’s a lovely place beneath the canopy. 🙂 I like ‘daisy -words’ and ‘eyes forget-me-nots’. I imagine a sweet young face with these phrases. 🙂
A rich canvas, cleverly painted.
A lovely place to be, thanks for taking me there, Bjorn! What a fun prompt.
beautiful imagery!