If you ever change your mind

The silence was like ice
before you dawned on me;
that night you smiled:

“We can remain together
if you want”.

And though more than thirty
years together since
have passed
I fear the dusk that falls
if you
ever change your mind (again).

Flames of love by Erte

Flames of love by Erte

Tomorrow I host the Quadrille at dVerse. A quadrille is a 44 word poem including a given word which is dawn. Join us at 9 PM EST with your offering.

January 29, 2017

40 responses to “If you ever change your mind

  1. A poignant poem …I like the rich way you use ‘dawn’ and ‘dusk’ and the sense of vulnerability. I discovered your preview by luck …was trying to pass by the Reader to get to my site but was drawn in…glad I was–now thoughts of dawn can start percolating for a possible Quadrille :))

  2. Love the use of “dawned” here. Ah yes….unconditional love, as you wish. The freedom to come and go at any time…and the hope they never leave. Enjoyed this!
    PS: Having trouble with internet connection in Bermuda — small price to pay for aquamarine seas 🙂

  3. Excellent Quadrille, brother. You are such a romantic. I love it. I tend to dwell on the dark side, where anger & sarcasm guide my quill.

  4. The title is deceptive and the way you have used the words ‘dawn’ and ‘dusk’ so skillful, the poem just breaks on me like a dawn. A delicate and honest love poem, Bjorn.

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  6. Oh this is soo wonderfully sweet and romantic! 😀 I literally held my breath through “I fear the dusk that falls if you ever change your mind (again).” Wishing you a most joyous birthday Bjorn 🙂

    Lots of love,

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