60 responses to “Trading jewelry”

1. Great historical twist. Loved it.

   • Thank you Brian… you should try the flash-fiction

     • I do flash fiction occasionally on my poetry blog. I have a hard enough time keeping up with the poetry prompts while writing two novels.

     • I imagine…

2. Ha ha ha. This is awesome. 🙂 I’ve been wondering where your Friday Fictioneers posts were hiding. Was she on hiatus from prompting for a couple of weeks?

   I love the implications given by the title. Her jewels for his. 🙂

   THIS is fantastic poetry tucked away in your prose: “Joe’s tongue traced the parchment of his lips.”

   • Ha.. i didn’t submit last week… but otherwise I’ve been consistent… 🙂

3. Wow, where did that come from? 🙂 Loved it.

   • A surprise… those aristocrats can be deadly…

4. I think he’s in for a surprise. And he deserves all he gets. Nicely done.

   • I think a surprise might be coming.

5. He’d better raise it to twenty – and quick! Excellent

   My silly story!

   • Don’t think she will sell… it’s just a lure.

6. Horrid man!
   Hope he gets his due.

   • He doesn’t have a chance…

7. Excellent story, Bjorn, but sadly devoid of nice people.

   • Great… so far all had said that Joe deserves it… but I don’t think Zara is overly nice either.

   • Ha! C.E. is looking for nice people in a story? Now, that’s funny.

     • You ain’t da only comic in da show, Russ!

8. Good work to tie Bolsheviks and Faberge into this prompt! Nice tale, and from the guy’s attitude, I think he’s going to get what he probably deserves from the knife!

   • Ha.. it would be an unlikely place to find Faberge jewelry… first I thought about Concha belts… but why not a Russian aristocrat?

     • Why not indeed 🙂

9. One can find all sorts of people on Route 66! Interesting take on the prompt. I like it very much.

   • The first think I thought of was the trading of jewelry when I saw the trading post… 🙂

10. I agree–clever title! What an interesting meeting of two very different characters! I enjoyed the details.

    • Very interesting indeed, and non of them overly nice

11. This was, as usual, wonderful! Greed is a horrid thing…

    • Greed is horrid, but sometimes it’s survival.

12. Hmmm. Pretty nice execution of story there. In fact, I thought this would be a great scene of a larger work. It asks a lot of questions as to the who and why of Zara. Well-done, Bjorn!

    • I had my mind up who Zara was inside, and she would be an interesting character to flesh out.

      • Yes, run with it. I think you have an interesting character here.

13. scum is scum in every language
    Tracey

14. накипь for instance (according to Google translate)

15. Great story – I don’t like Zara’s attitude but at the same time I’m looking forward to Joe getting what he deserves.

16. Dear Björn,

    The vision of his undulating belly is disturbing enough. What a piece of work. Ugh. Now your piece of work on the other hand…good descriptions…you had me there in the moment. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

17. Ten for the ring and only five for her? I hope she took the money and stabbed him.

18. I may be a bit off here, but though he is a dirty man, he didn’t force her into anything. So I find the reaction–too harsh. Great twist and wonderful writing.

    • Neither of them are pleasant, but I think she is worse in many ways… I think she will “only” rob him though…

19. Twist! I like it very much.

    • Hope it’s not the twist of a blade in the end-

20. it looks like he’ll get what he deserves. by the way, i saw the mountains in your picture when we drove from oslo to bergen last september. what a beautiful sight.

    • Ah.. yes Norway is a wonderful country… alas our country is a little bit flatter.

21. I wonder if she was a mail-order bride–and if so, what became of her husband? Did he get a taste of her blade as well?
    I see a lot of opportunity to expand this into a longer “Black Widow” piece.

    • She might have been, but if so, she probably did so with more intentions. It’s a character that can be expanded on (though I will not make a serial again at FF)

22. Your description of Joe is spot on. I can see exactly what kind of person he is!

    • I wonder if it’s the belly or his dry lips that makes it?

23. I loved the charecterizaction in this brilliant piece, of course, of Zara, who else.

    • Zara… yes it’s the Faberge that makes the difference I think

24. Oh no, a rat thief and a scum bag. LOLOL
    He was taking advantage, for sure. I hope her knife can get threw that undulating belly. You go girl. Boy, this got me riled. I guess that means it’s GREAT…!!!
    Isadora 😎

    • Ha.. I think she’s kind of craving to rob him though.

      • Me thinks there could be a longer dramatic story here. 😎

25. I do wonder if she has left a trail of death behind her. She certainly sounds a handful for her creator.

26. It sounds like she’s in no mood to take prisoners

27. He will get what he deserves…

28. This is going to end very badly for someone … You’ve painted such a clear picture here, I can almost smell his greasy body odour without you having to describe it. Nicely done

29. I fear a revolution is in the offing. Nice twist in the end.

30. Ugh…I know this guy!
    You’ve described him well.

31. hope it didn’t end badly for him, the scum

    http://obliqview.blogspot.in/2016/11/the-trading-post-prompt-jean-l-hays.html

32. Wow! Where does this come from, Björn? You of sweet temperament? I almost worry for your sweet love. But oh the writing. Chilling perfection.

33. Great twist, Bjorn. He’s going to end up paying more than $15–much more. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

34. Nice read 🙂

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