a morning firework
your skin my private vellum
finger painting stars
together earthbound falling
we grasp its infinity
Today Toni inspires us to write tanka at dVerse. It’s been a while but it was fun to play with the different elements of this poetry.
very sensual “firework”!
Your skin my private vellum
What a sensous and wonderful line!
This sizzles as morning firework. Love the tanka Bjorn!
I love this! It sizzles without being obvious and recalls the early tanka when written by the ladies of the court after a night with their lover..
This really moved me, Björn. The sensual language and attitude is simple and beautiful…and such an evocative title too. Wonderful!
Love this!
“finger painting stars – Ooooooo, lovely
Beautiful imagery.
Such a wonderfully sensuous write! ❤️
I too love that line ‘your skin my private vellum’ but that image of
finger painting stars’ really hits the spot!
Wow! So beautiful! ❤
Wow grasping infinity, or just float in the moment for as long as you can
Lovely imagery.
“your skin my private vellum
finger painting stars”
Oh that is just lovely!
Oh, that opening line…and then the second…yes!
Oh … VERY nice! Wow.
Paloma / Jen
Ah… nice to see you at dVerse…
Good to be back to writing again 🙂
what a well of creation you have to dip into – your tanka is tremendously powerful
Oh, this is exquisite! Loved all of this, especially the finger painting stars!
Falling stars earthbound are mesmerizing!
Hank
Elegant, sensuous and refined. Fantastic work, Bjorn!
Oh, I love this. Really powerful.
A beautiful tanka – really exceptional – and I read a lot of tanka.
Nice! I could meditate on this idea for a long time….