Trickle

Minutes trickle
tick-tock-prickle
heart beats
searching
passport,
suitcase,
toothpaste,
tickets,

haste, but
stuck in thickets.
syruped

rushing
seconds gushing
searching gates
way too late
travel nowhere

chewing pillow
screaming

dreaming

Abstract Speed + sound by Giacomo Balla

Abstract Speed + sound by Giacomo Balla

Shay wants us to write about a dream or dreaming at toads. My dreams are often about being too late running too slow.

August 19, 2016

15 responses to “Trickle

  1. I really like the way you presented your poem – I felt the need for haste in the reading… thankfully this was one scenario you could wake up from.

  2. Well written, capturing those dreams that make one wake in a cold sweat. Like that it also relates to reality so well. An enjoyable poem

  3. Perfect encapsulation of that dream feeling of suspension. I have many traveling dreams, usually involving the buses of a city I haven’t lived in for 30 years…great internal rhyme here, too.

  4. I liked reading about this little nightmare, Bjorn. Isn’t it a common theme that the things that worry a bit in the daytime become ‘gargantuous’ in those worried type dreams.
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  5. This is interesting, Perhaps, your dreams are telling you to slow down o-o-r-r-r-r perhaps, your dreams express your desire to not keep others waiting o-o-r-r-r-r …the stuff of dreams – always a bit of a puzzle. You did a great job of building the urgency in this one, I thought,

  6. Yes, Bjorn, I have known more than one person who always seems to dream of rushing, missing — these “stress” dreams where one may wake in a panic, sweaty and searching for the clock. Your poem read quick like the dream, I could feel the fast tempo of it — Thanks for sharing.

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