Today when summer’s stained, a gown
from lacerated clouds; It’s bruised
as painted smirks on sobbing clowns.
When flower beds lay decomposed
Today when neither sleet nor sun
embrace the bronzing skin of men
at oars on stinking rafts, their sons
with watered kelp and hair; amends
Today when days are long, yet short
when blue-light wails from sympathy.
We linger in rebellious thwart.
We’re stronger dressed with apathy.
Soul Of The Underground by Jean Dubuffet
Today it’s the 4th day for dVerse 5th year celebration. As usual we combine the prompt with an interview. Today it’s with Samuel Peralta, hosted by me. There is also a prompt to do twitter poem, 140 characters or less. You can do multiple stanzas (multiple tweets) if you want to. If you want to be inspired check out Sam’s prompt on twitter poem from 2013.
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July 21, 2016
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Painted smirks on sobbing clowns is a peel image.
Some great lines, Björn…the painted smirks on sobbing clowns was a most effective image..
I love your wordplay, Bjorn, it dances!
I know you write poetry on Twitter, & your comfort zone is evident within this fine piece. When I write TWITTER VERSE, each entry is a separate thought–I like the cohesion in your piece. Kudos for the line
/whee blue light wails from sympathy/.
Love each stanza, specially the last one with :
when blue-light wails from sympathy.
We linger in rebellious thwart.
There is power with short verses!
Ha I tried to make each stanza exactly 140 characters… 🙂
I love those ‘painted smirks on sobbing clowns’!
This is absolutely stunning.. you had me at the opening lines 🙂
Such strong imagery. Each stanza stands on its own but my fav is the 1st.
I like how you began each stanza with “Today” and how they each stand alone but tie in perfectly with each other. That last line is a jolt!
Beautiful verses! 🙂
Wonderful words!
i like the harmony maintained in different unique verses….
Delicious mix of sounds and words.
It’s bruised as painted
smirks on sobbing clowns
Like this kind of a paradox-like description. Who ever thought of a sobbing clown? Great lines Bjorn!
Hank
Captivating imagery, and I really liked the rhyme scheme.
Dressed for success with apathy. Sounds very modern. I love the way you use language.