My moon’s
a garden black
repulsive lie
a forest scream;
rain away,
sweet girl
my dream – run
and shadow less;
barefoot shot
like lightning,
drooled
we worshipped blue
skin and lathered meat
with frantic licks
for kicks
we played as greened –
this sordid smell.
The temptation and fall of Eve by William Blake
Grace runs leads us in the quadrille today 44 words and use the word green at dVerse, and I used some magnetic poetry to kick-start my writing. I will probably do more than one later tonight. Join us with your words at 3 PM CET.
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May 16, 2016
Björn Rudbergs writings 
I love this. I really do.
I’m sure you will come in with a perfect Quadrille tonight.
Mmm
Whew, this is indeed the dark green where shadows scream ~ Specially admiring the opening verses Bjorn ~
I enjoy the surprises that magnetic poetry offer. And “greened” as a verb works well.
*Snap *Snap I like this poem so much. Truly amazing. 🙂
Oh my….I clicked on “magnetic poetry” in your explanation and you mean you really did form it with the magnetic tiles! Wow – this is a dark green 🙂 “…like lightning drooled…”
And now we have the dark side of green. A truly dark metaphor for sin, rot, excess…one always thinks of being drenched in blood but this gives quite a good case for being drenched in green. I can see you are enjoying the magnetic poetry!
Very nice use of “greened” in this. And I’m going to have to go check out the magnetic poetry. I tried to do it last night from my phone, but it wouldn’t work properly.
What a dark twist, and I love how you used your magnetic poetry for inspiration.
I love that line, a “forest scream.” There’s something so wonderful with this line, I think because I can hear it… nature shouting, yelling. Awesome.
I came back to read the first stanza a couple more times….amazing. I will definitely have to check out the magnetic poetry as well. 🙂
I’m having fun with the virtual version of magnetic poetry, too. Although, I still love my orig-on-the-frig version. I was really captured by the line ‘run and shadow-less.’ It has a surrealist tone. Marvelous!
I think, brother, your magnetic tile for “K” got lost, so we read repulsive “lie”, which it could be, but mind throws in a verdant K. Lusty & dark, your Q shines, as only dark shadows & mold can.
As usual, your ekphrastic work is stunning.
Could you point me to magnetic poetry? Lively poem.
http://magneticpoetry.com/pages/play-online
Shivers down the spine stuff!
They must be darkling magnets, Bjorn. Superbly Gothic.
Holy cats. “Darkling magnets” is a flipping amazing phrase! Did you make that up?! Or is that already a thing? You should write a poem using that. Like, immediately.
Maybe later for this evening’s prompt:)
Very mystical. ..especially with the Adam and Eve image attached at the end.
I read this as if the speaker is the snake.
“shadow less” … I love that phrase. I wonder if he’s telling her to stop shadowing Adam, and God, and to “be herself” … by following (eating) him.
Everything about this is completely awesome. I have read this so many times and keep discovering new intricacies and hidden meanings.
“lightning drooled” is also a killer image … also “lathered meat”
That’s what’s so great with magnet poetry… you just have to find those combos…
It’s like watching the opening scenes of a dark fairy tale. 🙂
I tried the magnetic poetry again. It’s so fun when you can actually find your own voice in the random words
clicked this one yesterday because I already liked it before i understood it was magnetic
One goes through life to experience the good and bad! That makes us wholesome to stand up when counted.
Hank
Magnetic poetry is such fun to play with, and produces a new slant on things. 🙂