Conserved and shrinkwrapped, Amanda bowed her head and sighed.
“So I inherit everything?”, the solicitor kept silent.
“Is it a lot?”
The solicitor smiled and showed her a paper with the sum. She already had every penny of Christopher’s counted, and intended to invest them well. She craved plastic surgery. She needed the youth that Chris had stolen.
Shocked, she realized the amount was only half of what she had expected.
But she suppressed her anger, trilling:
“That’s a lot, and I’m the sole benefactor?”
The solicitor shook his head, weighing every word:
“I believe you have a younger sister?”
This week I decided to use the image as a metaphor. With those two well preserved cars I imagine a widow who are in for a surprise. I hope it worked.
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February 24, 2016
Dear Björn,
I got so caught up in your story I didn’t even think about its link to the prompt. I see the metaphor. Younger sister, indeed. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Ha.. and there are two well preserved cars on the tow truck… so much fun.
Oh. Ouch! 🙂
Indeed…
That was certainly a surprise. ‘Conserved and shrinkwrapped’ indeed. Hopefully the two sisters are as well preserved as those fabulous cars! 🙂
I wonder if they will continue to be well preserved when they meet next time… might be collision damages.
Let’s hope the younger sister provided more comfort to their benefactor than your main character did. Clever metaphor, Bjorn.
I wonder if he deserved any comfort… he doesn’t sound too nice… maybe none of them are really.
Oh, I hope younger sister does not fall a victim to your preserved MC. What a great metaphor!
Ha.. I guess there might be some dents ….
Intriguing piece, Bjorn, written to your normal high standard.
Thank you… somehow if you get the right plot it becomes easy to write.
Great. Nice take on the prompt…most unpredictable.
He he… a surprise is one of the great thing of writing.
Nice twist at the end. I can only imagine what the family Christmas dinner will be like this year for Amanda.
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I the Christmas dinner has to served without any knifes or forks… Soup only please.
Excellent choice.
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I have a feeling she really deserved that!
There are no good people in this story (maybe the solicitor)
Love your take on the prompt, and the two well used ladies in need of funds.
He he.. i think well preserved needs funding.
I read it as if Chris were her father, who had been abusing her. So she deserved that money. I think she had been protecting her younger sister from being abused. Or maybe she didn’t know there was a sister, being that he was such a shady guy.
My other interpretation is that the two (or more) girls were kidnapped and used as this guy’s property. So when he finally died, the #1 “daughter” assumed she’d finally be free, and have a little cash with which to reclaim her life.
OR … what if they’re polygamists? She is the only legal wife, so she assumed she’d get all the money. But no so, apparently.
Ah… There are many way to include those relationships… 🙂 .. maybe bigamist is the closest to my intended truth.
It’s bad enough that he was cheating on her…but with her sister? Yowza… Mind you, she does sound like a perfect b****, so maybe she deserved it…
I think there are many kind of rascals in this story.
I love it when the greedy and vain fall. Nice piece.
I think it’s good to like it… there’s morale in that.
Looks like that all the characters in your story have a bit of a villian in them. Even solicitor seems to take unusual pleasure in Amanda’s situation.
Good one.
Maybe even the solicitor… 🙂
That bloody sister spoils it again! Who’d have one?
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Ah.. I think there is not a lot of love in that relationship
if anything, she’s got her share. 🙂
Indeed… but it’s a strain to understand that it’s just a share.
She is not going to be a very happy widow.
She’s likely to spend it all in proceedings… maybe her name is Mrs. Jarndyce …
I don’t think these two will remain on sisterly terms for long. I’m sorry for her though. The guy did steal her youth and then he cheats with her younger sister. Lovely people all around.
I think there are people you rather not mix with… 🙂
Oh dear – her Chris had been playing away far too close to home!
I think he caused a lot… Her rests an unloved man.
Wow, he’s a cad even in death. And her craving for youth will never make her younger than her cheating younger sister!
I think they will be deadlocked in court over the will…
Hehe. “Had a sister”
Ahh .. A Freudian slip..
Oh, but she’s so ill. It’s why she isn’t here today! LOL Good one!
Hehe.. Sis, I have made mushroom soup just for you.
Less money to reclaim her youth because of her more youthful sister. She can’t catch a break!
Nothing to be gained any more,
This one brought a smile to my face, Bjorn. Very cleverly written.
Shadenfreude… Hehe
I see trouble brewing. It seems the sisters were not close. She didn’t even remember her at first. Well done, Bjorn. 🙂 — Suzanne
I before U, for some.. Maybe eye for eye will come.
Uh oh. That doesn’t bode well.
It will put a strain of family dinners.
She seems a smidge or two bitter. That could get so nasty.
I wouldn’t be surprised if there will be some really wild mushrooms in the stew.
Yep, it worked. As soon as the solicitor said “You have a sister” I immediately connected it to the two cars (though, I knew the picture well because I just wrote about it). Great story!
Ha.. yes the car in the background is a great beauty…
Oh my … a sister. Shock and dismay for all. A very unexpected twist to your story. Loved it, Bjorn.I like that it was an original interpretation to the photo prompt.
Isadora 😎
It’s fun to find a metaphor in a picture…
I saw what you did here. I liked it.
I like that you like it…
I think one word will do: ouch
Very clever metaphor, Bjorn. The older sister is going to have to share, which will most likely cut into her selfish plans. Great dialogue here. I could really hear her inner thoughts with your word choices.
Not a nice surprise for the widow. This takes sibling rivalry to new heights. Great story – most enjoyable, and the surprise ending works brilliantly.
What a time to find the skeleton in the closet! Enjoyed!!