Their ancient eyes


With ancient eyes, the sentinels ablaze
are making rounds; with constellations bring
in confidence encrypted signs, amaze
with visions, scents above: with diamond-rings
my fingers trace the nape of Virgo, touch
Orion’s belt and drink Aquarius’ wine.
I roar as Leo, graze with Taurus, nudge
the starlit sky on borrowed wings; divine
celestial bodies swirl; ancestral dance
of songlines from the past, to lead me on
without a map; to find my way in trance
through mazes of the night; to walk till dawn.
Their ancients eyes, are guides to lead the way
through labyrinths and vices of my day.

Star Map by Albrecht Durer

Star Map by Albrecht Durer


Today Toni mans the bar at dVerse poetics, and she wants us to write poetry about stars. Love those little diamonds up above, but I see them to seldom, usually it’s too cold in the winter night to be out and enjoy them (and in summer it’s to much daylight).
December 15, 2015

32 responses to “Their ancient eyes

  1. I am entirely jealous of your rhyming virtues and skills, but also highly inspired, thank you for that! I am also a tad bit sad for not seeing my starsign constellation mentioned, but the poem is wonderfully gentle that I could close my eyes and feel like I am swimmin through the nightsky.

  2. I love this section:
    “constellations bring
    in confidence encrypted signs, amaze
    in visions, scents above: with diamond-rings:
    my fingers trace the nape of Virgo, touch
    Orion’s belt and drink Aquarius’ wine”

  3. I enjoyed the journey through the constellations, Bjorn. Interesting reasons for not really seeing the stars much. I see them every night – summer or winter – outside my bedroom window. A comfort really in the middle of the night! Amazing that the same ‘ancients eyes’ which existed from the beginning of time are still there!

  4. I’m not surprised that you chose a sonnet for this wonderful prompt and yours lends so much stateliness to the partial trip through the Zodiac.I do want to see a follow-up, though. Let’s take in all of it. (I’m fortunate to live in deserts where the stars still shine, though less than they used to.)

  5. I think this is such an excellent sonnet – Ancient eyes – perfect. And walking the mazes of night in a trance – like the ancients who at certain times of the year, progressed along ley lines carrying their animals, the priests playing their light magic music honoring their gods under the ancient eyes of the stars. This is a spectacular poem. Thank you.

  6. I can imagine it must be difficult to see the stars where you live – as you say, too cold in winter, too light in summer. But do you ever get the Northern Lights or would you have to go much further north for that? I dream of seeing them some day.
    As for the poem – a romp (but a dignified one) through the stars and mythology, like hanging onto the swirling tail of a comet.

  7. I specially admire this part:

    my fingers trace the nape of Virgo, touch
    Orion’s belt and drink Aquarius’ wine.
    I roar as Leo, graze with Taurus, nudge
    the starlit sky on borrowed wings;

    Love that stars are our guides in life ~

  8. Excellent response to the prompt. I must confess, I’ve never been very good at finding constellations. Unless someone draws the lines between the stars for me, all I see is a sea of bright dots. I love the idea of being guided by the stars that you’ve incorporated and admire people who can actually navigate by them. Peace, Linda

  9. Incredible images. I will never cease to be astonished at how adept you are at pulling together form poems. Responding to a prompt (within the confines of a time restriction, I assume) with such a well constructed, beautifully rendered sonnet is mind-blowing. That you pull off this AMAZING feat time and time again … is the stuff of legends. I am in awe!

  10. Your beautiful poem brings to life the ancient mappings of the constellations and how we came to have the different Zodiac signs. Staring into the heavens and seeing the countless stars is always an awe-inspiring sight.

  11. Absolutely amazing! The zodiac signs and constellations make a truly inspiring take on the prompt. They have personalities here and how you make them shine…

  12. I am always impressed by your poetic skills, your adept use of form and rhyming skills. This poem was a wonderful wander amidst the stars, took me back to childhood stargazing! I rarely see the stars these days, too much light pollution ….

  13. This has such an organic, ancient, mystical, and almost tribal theme going on..meaning humans…reminder of Solstice arriving…I, too, look forward to your excellent, far reaching sonnetts 😉

  14. Wonderful!
    These are my favorite lines.
    “ancestral dance
    of songlines from the past, to lead me on
    without a map; to find my way in trance
    through mazes of the night; to walk till dawn.”
    These lines, to me, are especially magical!

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