We’re virtuous poets lacking faith
untouched by sin, but sent to hell
to Limbo, where we’re left like wraiths
It’s not like heaven, just a shell
protecting from the deeper caves
and thick with fumes of Asphodel
And there we found our final grave
the pagans never crowned in sin,
unbaptized still not daemon’s slaves.
This is 55 word Terza Rima for the prompt at toads. To fit my description of the first circle of hell (which is really Hades) to 55 words I went with tetrameter. I also link this to Poetry Pantry
July 5, 2015

Limbo can be a hazardous place where there seems to be no fixed identity. An interesting poem.
a very interesting concept. limbo is often a place of the unwanted of undecided entities. but does ot really exist. i may never know
Gives me the shivers…
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Limbo could be preferable…no choirs, no hellfire, no tyrants…
You worked so well with your chosen form, Bjorn. Not an easy exercise, given the word limit. I love your choice of words and the description of Limbo is quite chilling. Trust the human imagination to come up with a place more sinister than hell to scare the daylights out of the living.
Never fancied Limbo…I want a quick decision!
You know, I think I would rather the fires of hell than limbo – neither earning heaven or hell. Think I would have to wonder at the point of life to be so mediocre
I guess poetry is a kind of limbo – are we in life or observing it…can we see and feel too much of whatever comes next? I still don’t think I’d swop it for a more certain place in life…and after..thank you for making me think!
i shiver at the thought of poets being in a meaningless void…ha..it’s worse than hell…nice write…
It feels like limbo when the desire to write is strong but the means just won’t come. Great job, Bjorn
I like the description of the different levels you gave. I hadn’t thought much about limbo ever, but I think the description of it as ‘just a shell’ works. I picture limbo as a region from which one could move in either direction.
Nice rhyming too!
Yes, exactly what I was thinking–and a very clean and sharp vision in 55 precise and originally rhymed words–especially love the fumes of Asphodel, released in the meadow of the Underworld for those whose work is done.
This is so intense! Well captured 🙂
Very nice to read, Bjorn. I use ‘limbo’ (should I capitalize?) quite often in my speech. Yours I relate to Pergatory instead of indecision.
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lets do no sin
I hope that’s a little re(e)fer in your title.
Have you seen the movie What Dreams May Come? It’s one of my favorites. Anyway, the wife spends a good portion of the movie in the place you’re describing. But she doesn’t have to be; she unknowingly chooses it because she can’t completely comprehend her situation.
Limb-O. Ha.
I have seen the movie What Dreams May Come It is a favourite n just incredibly filmed creations are just amazing as is the story line I inspire anyone who hasn’t watched to do so its on DVD 🙂
Oh I have never seen that film.. but I think ending up in limbo is a strong place.. in the Dante’s version limbo was a place in hell that was reserved for good people that were not Christian.. many of the images are taken from Hades of the greek mythology.. therefore the image of the Asphodel… hmmm
love it! you turn out some great lines (the pagans never crowned in sin) and perhaps limbo is where all Sunday poets will go for breaking the Sabbath. p.s just taken a look at toads – enticing!
I love your wording throughout this whole piece. Excellent 55 🙂
You executed form and meter to perfection!!!!!!!
Wow Bjorn, I so admire your skill at executing form. I’m not qualified to judge, but I think it’s excellent.
Excellent and really interesting.
Ah, that sounds like a Cahtolic Limbo. Rhyme and meter are flawless too. Wonderfully done, you pagan you!
I like how the different stanzas suggest the descent into hell. My favorite image is that of limbo as a ‘shell’. To me it is a place where not much, if anything, happens.
Bjorn–I briefly have internet service today so can’t write much–you use your form and your idea so well–succinct but definitely gets your ideas accross–I don’t know–it feels pretty blank and yet of course there’s a freedom! Thanks. k.
Limbo is horrible enough “here”–I can’t imagine it forever, guess that would truly bring on insanity.
your poem and especially its accompanying artwork reminds me so much of my own deceased grandfather’s theological books that i happily perused through in his office when he wasn’t home. i remember the feelings of dread and amusement just by looking at very archaic religious artwork. good job though!!!
Yikes, yikes. To be avoided.
interesting…waiting in limbo does not sound like the place to dwell..a dark deep void…
I have never liked the idea of limbo in life or death…I am not a patient person.
When I was a kid, I worried a lot about limbo. That was before I started worrying about people who, having never heard the churches doctrines, couldn’t get into heaven because they didn’t believe. Soon after that I stopped seeking answers in religious dogma.
Oh yes.. I think there is an irony in limbo that it leads to dogma that is quite contradictory in my view. I really wanted that to come through..
I have always thought of Limbo as that in-between place, neither one thing or another. There are those who believe that our existence is Limbo.
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/
Wow! This is very cool, Bjorn!
A very wise poem. The strangeness of the “Inferno” is well captured.
In this limbo, we are sure to be in great company. I wonder if that would be like a French Cafe full of existentialists (unrepentant) and surrealist commies?
Otherworldly for sure!
Limbo is a kind of holding area; until direction is verified..It is not surprising that poets should end up in that location, alongside pagans and the like..We tempt others as well as ourselves, with our words..Testing truths.
Eileen
yours is a clever metaphor for a poets’s task. we are not involved yet we involve our selves through our imagination of things
Bjorn i’m happy you dropped in at my Sunday Lime
much love…
You allowed me to consider a place and time I never give thought to. A good exercise in writing and in reading. Thanks, Bjorn.
thick with fumes of Asphodel!
Powerful
Awesome point of view…
Limbo..I am not fond of that place. Great perspective!
a bold and powerful treatment, Bjorn ~