In glowing nights of sanguine hips,
we shed our last maracas tears;
to sway away when sun has slipped.
From burning cheeks, mascara drips,
but doom of dawn is not yet near,
this glowing night of sanguine hips.
With graveyard dust on blood-filled lips,
we’re dancing with the utmost care;
and sway away when sun has slipped.
We’re blessed by songs in sooty scripts
within this shroud the light is dear,
in glowing nights of sanguine hips.
Cause 6 feet under, worms will grip
our corazon of moonlit years.
We sway away when sun has slipped.
You gently let your eyelids zip,
to quench the dread of concrete fears.
Our final night of sanguine hips,
sashay below when sun has slipped.
Today we have a guest blogger at dVerse MTB, and the prompt on prosody is to in addition add a note on why you have written it as you have. The choice of form and how we have used different poetic tools to achieve the effect.
So: this poem is actually an old poem I wrote for a challenge but it has never appeared on a blog. It is based on music inspiration of listening to los Lobos, and then turned into a Villanelle. Since the theme is a death dance I wanted to return to the roots of the Villanelle and make it dancing by using tetrameter instead of pentameter. But to still make it soft I had to break it up a little by intentionally choosing a few slanted rhymes and a little off-beat iambs. I also intentionally broke some of the repeated lines to avoid it to be too repetitive. The choice of including Spanish words was to add a little spice, and color. There are a few instances of alliteration, and I could potentially modify it a little bit further to increase it. But hey this is dance poetry.
May 28, 2015