How to share the grain.


“It must be filled with grain”,

Ian’s eyes burned with hunger, a finger resting on the trigger of their only AK-47.

“It’s all ours now”, his gaze met Sara’s.

Sara felt her husband moving for Ian’s gun but he was still too late.

“BOOM”

Robert lay still beside her.

“One less share, now it’s more for us”, Ian crossed the fence.

Sara stopped behind the fence, signalling for the others to wait, pointing at the sign.

“WARNING MINES”

With hands covering her ears she waited for the explosion, trusting Robert’s ballistic vest that only one share had to be deducted.


I took the route of writing a little tale of post-apocalypse, imagining a group of survivors where the power of a single gun might need to be handled. It was a long time since I wrote a tale with a twist so I thought this might work.

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Friday Fictioneers is lead by Rochelle Wissoff-Fields and we all try to write stories to the same pictures. The only restriction is to use 100 words (or something like it).



May 13, 2015

49 responses to “How to share the grain.

  1. Wow, neat little story that is crying out to be a longer piece!! What is it with grain silos that’s making us all think of murders, death and traps? How come we writers don’t see a simple beautiful landscape?

  2. Very dark scenario. Survivors who use all their senses, including the ability to read signs, are clearly at an advantage. Great story.

  3. Bjorn,
    I grasped the basic scenario but I’m glad you included the explanation so I was sure. Hopefully his vest can stop an AK-47 round and hopefully all the grain isn’t blown up with Ian. You tell a very vivid story here.
    -David

  4. The will to do whatever it takes to survive is clearly painted in this little prose. Hunger definitely changes the mindset. Loved the twist at the end.

  5. Good work, Bjorn! Your story is filled out and intriguing. Plenty of action and a full story in so few words. Great job.

    All my best,
    MG

  6. What’s great about apocalyptic tales is not telling the impossible, but showing the extremes that lie within everyone. Good story!

  7. Interesting. I think you could play this out into an interesting short story, giving more weight to why they need it, and are willing to go to such lengths to protect it — or obtain it.

  8. Exciting stuff. I see the makings of a movie there, Björn.
    Oh, the paradox of Armageddon-style scenarios — that war and weaponry has most likely caused the mayhem in the first place, and yet survivors depend upon weapons to survive.
    PS I’m into Armageddon this week, too, as are a few other fictiioneers. There’s something about that image prompt …

  9. Great story, Bjorn. 🙂 I’d say they’re better off without Ian. Hopefully the rest of them can all read signs better than him!

  10. I’m getting the understanding that Robert is not dead but deciding not to show it. Good story. This would be a dangerous time, and let’s hope it never comes to that. Well done, Bjorn. 🙂 — Suzanne

  11. I’d say Ian will soon no longer be the leader. But, hey, if he can’t read the signs . . .
    Great story. Just the right amount of tension and creepiness!

  12. Bjorn, Well done! This is plenty bleak for a post- apocalyptic scene. The mines serve as a reminder that you never know what is around the corner and you can never let your guard down.

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