With audience in awe, my authority is heard
my influence can infiltrate, for infinity I’m sold
I exercise extortion, and examples I will set
as glamorously gladiators gladly die for me.
My training tranquillize, I treat myself to this
as emptiness empoison me, and empathy will leave.
And very soon in verbal songs, my voice commands the troops
and foolishly they follow me, they fold to my ideas.
With blood and blades, they blatantly will kill
But as I dream this drama, I drag into what’s real
and swiftly sweep the scene, It’s swell to get my dues
Copyright Sandra Cook
First of all, many apologies for all entries I didn’t visit last week. Many thanks for all the comments. This week I wanted to do it slightly different and do an alliterative verse. This is a little like old English or Norse form where the rhythm is accentuated by alliterations.
Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful and dedicated group of bloggers that write a story or a poem (or both) to the same picture. Rochelle leads this firmly with silken gloves. I appreciate all feedback of course…
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October 9, 2013
Intriguing write… loved the alliteration. 🙂
I absolutely adore alliteration, darling, so these whimsical words win with me.
I hope you had fun with the alliteration it was very well done.
What a dream that would be…
That last line made this piece pop! 😀
Hey Bjorn. Can you tell me what you use to get the blue Linky guy? I have not been able to put that in my Friday Fictioneer since it changed.
If you follow the link a little bit down you’ll find the right code… I had problems a while. Search for wordpress.com in the page with the code…
Thanks for the introduction to this unique style of verse. At least as far as I’m concerned. Others might be well acquainted with it. 🙂
Don’t think so.. very old English.. we wrote it a little while in dVerse.
Well, I’m so glad you shared it with us. We’d probably never have known it otherwise.
Ambition aptly attained.
janet
Nice.
You may now join my group for creative junkies AAAA- Alliance of Artists Addicted to Alliteration.
😉 it’s great fun
Hail Caesar, Emperor of Alliteration! Nice job.
This was a fun read, with interesting pacing and alliteration… nice work!
Great take and well crafted.
yes, well crafted. i very much enjoyed the rhythm. 🙂
Dear Bjorn,
i loved this flight of fancy, the title alone is worth the price of admission. (Aren’t all songs verbal?) Your imagination is unfettered and I like that. Keep it up.
Aloha,
Doug
Dear Björn,
Fascinatingly fine feat of Friday Fictioneers frivolity.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Great mood you’ve created. To dream is to succeed in some world. Or so I’d like to believe.
I really enjoyed the vivid images suddenly being bristled off by a long handled broom.
Thanks for sharing!
Alliterations are always allowable when one is experimenting exponentially with English, not exactly a languorous language.
Fearlessly flying in the face of flash Friday fiction framework. I enjoyed the alliterative allusions.
Well done Bjorn, yes to get one’s dues is important.
Exquisite and dark. Well done, Bjorn!
Hi Bjorn,
Great voice here, and harmonic sonic associations. Now you’ve got me doing it. Didn’t know alliteration was a feature of Old English, so thanks for that. Ron
I agree with Doug–catchy title. I could truly see this, and enjoyed the alliteration.
Enjoyed the verse: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/10/09/friday-fictioneers-stairway-of-the-gods-pg13-101113/