After a week vacation I’m back with a 100 word story in Friday Fictioneers. Very nice picture, and I have a long time been eager to write a Science Fiction story. Of course it’s exactly 100 words.
Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful group of bloggers from around the world who every week gather to write a story of 100 words (more or less). If you want to know more, go to Rochelle Wissoff-Fields page and check it out. If you only want to check out the great stories click the little blue guy at the bottom.
Copyright Janet Webb
On the peaceful planet of Zlook they’d made an exciting discovery:
They found a somewhat intelligent life-form on another planet, but also a meteor destined to destroy that world. Therefore a rescue expedition with blueprints to save their poor neighbors was sent out.
Captain Zirk looked dashing in his yellow striped uniform, and from the bridge of his ship he safely brought it to ground on a field of boulders.
He tuned his babelfish to listen to the conversation of some giants:
“Wasps” they screamed, and before communication was established Captain Zirk and his crew was exterminated, thus dooming Earth.
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April 17, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Loving the Babelfish-yes!!
Thank you
Oh no! Unlucky.
For us and them 🙂
Nice work Bjorn
p.s. Done should probably be made in line 1.
You are perfectly right… corrected.
I have to ask, is the “ship” piloted by wasps/hornets? The yellow striped uniform? Assuming the hornet nest was the “ship”. Very clever and poor crew…out to save the world.
I think the highly intelligent crew looks a lot like wasps… and the ship like a hornet’s nest…. and thus the saviour of humanity was destroyed.
Thank you. Sometimes just have to make sure my thinking is on course. Glad it was!
Ah..tricky write 😉 going to visit the story web-site
Do so, it’s a great community.
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janet
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Brilliant … Totally brilliant
Thank you 😉
The Babel fish is hilarious! Good one.
Thank you 🙂
great story – only goes to prove how too quick we are to judge.
Be careful with the wasps 🙂
Björn, fantastic. Just great. So creative and original. Loved this! Mankind at his finest! Shoot and ask questions later!
Thank you 🙂
Ah BR no one writes a babelfish quite like you 😉
I wrote it in Swedish first, but because of my babelfish it came out English 🙂
😀 (No babelfish were harmed in the making of this emoticon!)
entertaining! a very good one
Thank you 🙂
humorous loved this 🙂
Thank you 🙂
This is my favorite story this week! Very well done ! And I loved the alien names: Captain Zirk of the planet Zlook. Brilliant!
Thank you 🙂
hahahahaha!
Denmother
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Well, I would have said “Brilliant,” but that would be repetitious, since so many have already done so. But they are right. Bjorn, this story is so perfectly executed! It teaches a lesson but is absolutely hilarious at the same time. Loved it! So glad you went the sci-fi route. It is perfect.
Thank you.. 🙂
Zirk from Zlook… Love it!!! yellow striped uniform… somewhat intelligent life-form… some giants… “Wasps” they screamed… a gem in every sentence. This is one of your best!
Thank you… and a tragedy for humankind.
Sad that such courage (and dashing looking soldiers) would end up in tragedy. But also pretty damn funny!
I am glad you liked it.
Fun. I just wish wasps also made honey. So many have already penned similar delightful lines. So playful. And yet could be a warning too.
…Wasn’t planning on opening the door…just yet. But thanks for the warning 🙂 and your visit too.
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I love the idea that the expedition is mistaken for wasps and as such exterminated…who knows what the insects of our world really think 🙂
A few suggestions: I think you could cut and re-word a lot in the first few lines. You are repeating “planet” and I don’t think it’s necessary. I assume Zlook is Earth so you can delete “another planet” and maybe change the end to “Destined to destroy that world” or something
Thank you for your feedback.
I thought about the repitition of planet a lot.. but Zlook is actually another planet far away.. the inhabitants just happens to look like wasps… I think maybe that some of it have a few referenses to Hitchhikers Guide to the Universe… 🙂
I will check
Dear Bjorn,
A well crafted sci fi from a different Point of view. I like.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you… a great picture to go from
And we would, too.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/04/18/friday-fictioneers-4192013-genre-sci-fi-pg/
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there goes the planet. damn but why did they have to be so tiny.. a fun story. ^^ and would’ve loved to find out how they planned on saving Earth
But sorry to say the earth is doomed.
great Sci-Fly
Earthlings will never learn
never.. kill first ask thereafter
42!
exactly ?
hitchhiker’s guide to the galaxy – – answer to what is the meaning of life 🙂
I know.. but that’s why I had a question mark after… the answer was known but not the question. Sorry for being to obscure.
Well done! A great take combining Startrek with the photo prompt.
Thank you 🙂
The Babelfish did me in. Brilliant!
and imagine to fit it in a wasp’s ear.
Well that was pretty nutty – you had me in stitches! I love the planet Zlook!
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Great take, Bjorn
Thank you 🙂
I’m smiling while frowning as I read your story. 🙂 (Frowning, thinking of our actual bee crisis.)
Poor bees.. they probably had a remedy for that also.
Fun story and reminds me of an episode from the old Outer Limits TV show (in the 60’s!) Nice yellow striped uniform!
🙂 would have liked to see that
Imaginative tale, Bjorn. Their hope was gone in an instant! Oh, too bad for Earth.
Yes indeed… all hope is probably already lost.
Poor heroic Captain Zirk! Maybe the Zlookians – Zlookish? Zlookese? – should have brought a cargo of babelfish and turned them loose on the endangered planet before landing themselves, so there would be a better chance of communicating with the semi-intelligent natives 😉
I wonder if babelfishes work on somewhat intelligent lifeforms ..
Always be nice to the zlookians is what I’m taking away from this one!
Indeed.. zlookians are peaceful
Very enjoyable and well written. I have to admit I’m still chuckling at the image of William Shatner in a yellow striped suit! Cleverly done
Dee
Yes that would be a sight. 🙂
That’s awesome. I am a fan of stories about interplanetary misunderstandings. It reminds me of this Far Side comic: http://www.onlyinthefuture.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/alien-hands-far-side.jpg
I recall that awesome Far Side comic… Don’t know if it was in the back of my mind
In any case, great story. Worthy of Douglas Adams himself. 🙂
Great story, loved the yellow striped uniform. Good to see you back Bjorn. 🙂
I’m glad to be back 🙂
Hi Bjorn – Enjoyed your gloom and doom, comical, take on StarTrek. Wonder if the wasps took over after the locusts?
Yes indeed… the locusts came from planet Grong
Love it!
Oh, those foolish humans! Never understanding what’s right under their noses! Glad you didn’t sacrifice Captain Picard for this expedition….
Somewhat intelligent, eh? 🙂
LOL 🙂
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