Doomsday – Friday fictioneers

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After a week vacation I’m back with a 100 word story in Friday Fictioneers. Very nice picture, and I have a long time been eager to write a Science Fiction story. Of course it’s exactly 100 words.

Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful group of bloggers from around the world who every week gather to write a story of 100 words (more or less). If you want to know more, go to Rochelle Wissoff-Fields page and check it out. If you only want to check out the great stories click the little blue guy at the bottom.

Copyright Janet Webb

Copyright Janet Webb

On the peaceful planet of Zlook they’d made an exciting discovery:

They found a somewhat intelligent life-form on another planet, but also a meteor destined to destroy that world. Therefore a rescue expedition with blueprints to save their poor neighbors was sent out.

Captain Zirk looked dashing in his yellow striped uniform, and from the bridge of his ship he safely brought it to ground on a field of boulders.

He tuned his babelfish to listen to the conversation of some giants:

“Wasps” they screamed, and before communication was established Captain Zirk and his crew was exterminated, thus dooming Earth.



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April 17, 2013

86 responses to “Doomsday – Friday fictioneers”

  4. I have to ask, is the “ship” piloted by wasps/hornets? The yellow striped uniform? Assuming the hornet nest was the “ship”. Very clever and poor crew…out to save the world.

  16. Well, I would have said “Brilliant,” but that would be repetitious, since so many have already done so. But they are right. Bjorn, this story is so perfectly executed! It teaches a lesson but is absolutely hilarious at the same time. Loved it! So glad you went the sci-fi route. It is perfect.

  17. Zirk from Zlook… Love it!!! yellow striped uniform… somewhat intelligent life-form… some giants… “Wasps” they screamed… a gem in every sentence. This is one of your best!

  19. Fun. I just wish wasps also made honey. So many have already penned similar delightful lines. So playful. And yet could be a warning too.
    …Wasn’t planning on opening the door…just yet. But thanks for the warning 🙂 and your visit too.

  20. I love the idea that the expedition is mistaken for wasps and as such exterminated…who knows what the insects of our world really think 🙂

    A few suggestions: I think you could cut and re-word a lot in the first few lines. You are repeating “planet” and I don’t think it’s necessary. I assume Zlook is Earth so you can delete “another planet” and maybe change the end to “Destined to destroy that world” or something

    • Thank you for your feedback.
      I thought about the repitition of planet a lot.. but Zlook is actually another planet far away.. the inhabitants just happens to look like wasps… I think maybe that some of it have a few referenses to Hitchhikers Guide to the Universe… 🙂

      I will check

  23. there goes the planet. damn but why did they have to be so tiny.. a fun story. ^^ and would’ve loved to find out how they planned on saving Earth

  30. I’m smiling while frowning as I read your story. 🙂 (Frowning, thinking of our actual bee crisis.)

  33. Poor heroic Captain Zirk! Maybe the Zlookians – Zlookish? Zlookese? – should have brought a cargo of babelfish and turned them loose on the endangered planet before landing themselves, so there would be a better chance of communicating with the semi-intelligent natives 😉

  35. Very enjoyable and well written. I have to admit I’m still chuckling at the image of William Shatner in a yellow striped suit! Cleverly done
    Dee

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