My mind abuzz
in closeness
skin to skin
mane on chest,
alloy of breath
that set ablaze
my blood;
my loins, my flesh
while
in my veins
your venom
slowly swirls
to mould
my wit to yours
until
you leave me
colder
than before.
Today Mish hosts the Quadrille at dVerse where we should use the word blaze.
April 29, 202
practising for a whole life
dancing with my muse
haikai poetry matters
Running in the slow lane
The view from here ... Or here!
“Life is like riding a bicycle. To keep your balance, you must keep moving.” — Albert Einstein
chronicling my quarter life crisis
Now we see through a glass, darkly
rejuvenatement - not retirement
words and scribble.
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Oooh, this is great. I have a fascination with snakes.
They are symbols of temptation too.
Maybe that’s why I like them – smile
Snakily dark and setting blood ablaze – love it, Björn, especially:
‘in my veins
your venom
slowly swirls
to mould
my wit to yours’.
I find that the quadrille often works well with seductive lines.
Oh wow, the poem itself was like a temptation with it’s terse lines pulling me in. Intense and so effective with that chilly ending.
Life it both warm and cold.
“mane on chest” “alloy of breath” wonderful sensory imagery!
Thank you… I tried to find some imagery that fitted.
You’re welcome. The AI image is frightening. I guess being enchanted with serpent venom swirling through one’s veins would be.
Your Q is ablaze with temptation! Love the twist at the end.
Falling for such seduction can never end well.
Indeed.
seductive and dark love it
I happy it works
Whew…..my pulse is rocking with these words!
“while
in my veins
your venom
slowly swirls”
and these add to the seduction and wariness for me.
Indeed… venom is what it may feel like.
I’m picturing a horse with fangs. A vampire horse? 🤔
Like this 🙂
😃😄😅😆 Wow! AI is good for something.
Nicely done Bjorn.
🧛♀️🧛♀️🧛♀️
What a seductive write Bjorn! Not a word wasted either!
With 44 words there is nothing to waste
Always brushing denotes like for a person. We had to keep Minnie’s mane short because she developed a fistula. She liked me, I rode her to school. She would nuzzle me, but rubbing her mane was like brushing my skin with a stiff brush.
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A mane of a horse can be a bit brush-like
It feels just like being eaten by a wolf, doesn’t it?… And yet, he still had three hands left. The balls he held were questionable at best, but Skadi knew how to dance them.
Good words. Many meanings can be derived from them.
Not sure how to bring Skaði into the story… but I like the interpretation
Was it not about Loki’s punishment? It seems like I misinterpreted 😅 I have had him on my mind lately
He was not on my mind, but I like that you saw it in the poem.
o dear that was such a disappointing ending.
Björn, thanks for dropping by my blog
much♡love
Sounds a bit like poison ivy comes a creeping! Well done!
Ah, another unhealthy relationship (as you noted my piece was about). Beautifully written, compact with much impact.
WOW! This is visceral, Bjorn. So well done.
Thank you… I tried my best to make it so
Oooh… How often does one of the two get lost in the other’s manipulations? Beautifully evocative, Björn.
Thank you… it must be hard both to live with such manipulation and being manipulated.
I know only too well (when I was young and naïve, of course). Then it becomes how to extricate yourself. Just as you are ready to leave, they turn on the charm full-force and you doubt yourself.
Whoosh!! From the title of your quadrille to the last word ~~ Dark Seduction is quite the attention grabber!!
Wow! Wisely worded Q, Bjorn. 🙂
Absolutely chilling, this poisonous yet passionate desire for the lover.
uhm….. WOW!
~David
I love the contrast of how velvety smooth this reads thanks to your evocative description compared with the short terse lines – aligned in form and content.