the snow
clinging
to his jacket
melts and
trickle instinctively
onto his skin
a waning moon
still shrouded
is calling farewell
as November
is dying
in ice
Today we are writing mirrored Cherita with Laura at dVerse. Form consists of first three stanzas with one, two and three lines respectively and then the same in reverse. No word or syllable count but it has to tell a story and be imagist.
I hope I did it right.
November 30, 2023
Björn Rudbergs writings 
I think you did it more “right” than I did. Think I forgot the imagist piece entirely. But my poem does look like a Christmas tree, so there’s that.
I like the idea of the snow having instinct, and the moon bidding farewell to November.❤️
I tried to write it very brief, and giving the snow instinct made sense to that cold feeling when you walk in snow.
How is it that we are writing the same subject..ha..ha… Love the waning moon, as we say goodbye to November.
It was a subject that came naturally.
no wonder snow was your fist line – I loved where you took it though
Another snowy cherita, and a waning moon, Björn. I love the detail of the snow ‘clinging to his jacket’ and melting and trickling ‘instinctively
onto his skin’.
November dying in ice is apt. Long nights and short days of cold to follow.
“The snow clinging to his jacket” is so vivid. And melting too. Great verb choices.
This is beautiful Grace (PS I have snow and the moon in mine too 😄 must be something in the air)
Sorry Björn got my names mixed up I had read Grace’s !
We both started with snow
🙌
Beautiful!
Excellent Björn. Couldn’t tell you if it was correctly done but it certainly is a wonderful piece of writing. Love the image you created as well.
i think you did it perfectly right! ❤
Yours is much more imagist , Björn- I think I too missed that bit of the prompt – that first time snow melts down your neck is forgivable and novel but will the feeling continue after many exposures to it?
Great imagery–I love November is dying in ice.
love this!!
❤
David
wonderful visuals (K)
So GOOD, from beginning to end!
Chilly! Very atmospheric AI image that works well.
We had the first snow this morning, only a few inches but a foretelling of what is coming. Your cherita is beautiful, an ice clad November quite the visual.
Beautiful chilly atmosphere, that I enjoyed.
I didn’t know how to do it but you’ve shown me. I like November dying in ice.
So fitting for the last day of November. Love the transition from sensory to the philosophical through metaphor.