Farewell to fall

soft the crackle-crack
frozen leaves beneath my soles
in this doubtful fizz of dawn
as autumn bids farewell
with hoarfrost heavy in his beard

Today Grace hosts dVerse MTB with a form that was new to me, the Wayra:

1.a pentastich, a poem in 5 lines.
2.syllabic, 5-7-7-6-8
3.unrhymed.

Join us and write this short form. We are also encouraged to include onomatopoeia.

November 18, 2021

30 responses to “Farewell to fall

  1. This is exquisitely woven, Bjorn! I love the departure of Fall here with “hoarfrost heavy in his beard.” Such a strong image! 💝💝

  2. A perfectly woven Wayra, adieu to Fall, prepare for snow up to the windows, and treachery on the highways. Your poem is gentle, winter is not.

  3. Beautifully textured sounds……that description of the step in frosty leaves…yes! And autumn ends heavier than it started….

  4. We must have caught the same inspirational wave, Bjorn. Loved “doubtful fizz of the dawn.” There can’t be a better way to capture this bleak feeling in onomatopoeia!
    pax,
    dora

  5. That first line is sharp and balanced, and you can feel all the mists and moods of autumn in this short piece. Visual, yet the sounds are sharp and clear as well. And I appreciate the use of hoarfrost–that is a hard word to work into modern poems, but it’s perfect here.

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