Tie me not with cash
or chain me down
to properties or gold;
if you say that
freedom can be caged
I’ll break my bonds;
but whisper wind
me to your life
and I will knot
my heart with yours.
Quadrille with Mish at dVerse and the word is knot, hope this works.
March 22, 2020
Such a clever weaving of the prompt word! Love the sound-play of the ending
‘and I will knot/
my heart with yours’
Almost like you wouldn’t, but it turns out you would…
I love the wordplay, Björn, and, coincidentally, I had a card of ‘The Beautiful Lady Without Pity’ for many years which sadly was lost in one of my many moves. The last stanza of your quadrille is delicate, romantic and memorable.
This poem feels like a veil covering lovers.
You’re so tender and vulnerable here. As I read the words, an image of two canaries in a gilded cage came to mind. Do you think that now that they have each other, there is no need for them to sing?
I hope it’s not a cage but just a willing companionship.
I like the idea that freedom can ultimately entwine two hearts. The contrasts are profound and so beautifully rendered.
I like the word play–and the way two hearts can willingly be knotted without being caged.
The freedom to leave or stay, the choice to be en-knotted. Lovely, Bjorn. You are such a romantic poet.
Love the wordplay, and the “but whisper wind” made me swoon a bit. 😊
“but whisper wind/and wrap/me to your life” – my favorite line!
as beutifully written as always
This has a heartbeat. 🙂 Lovely!
you knotted my heart with that one
Thank you for dropping by to read mine
Amazing facility with a second language.
This is very romantic. No chains, ties, cages, or bonds, just softness and open movement. I should use this as a life motto. Much enjoyed.
Your words so beautifully illustrate the image, Bjorn. Bravo
Love without commitment can be breezy 😉
oh…. the w’s and the wrap-knot combination. I love this, Björn
ah the kind of love I dream of …
Simply beautiful… ‘whisper wind’ gives a freeing sensation. Your words are musical.
Something about “wrap me to your life” is just beautiful and perfect.
Lovely poem. I too like the word play in this piece.
Love the title and the ending lines, a passionate quadrille for a boring Monday! 😍
Very good use of the word not/knot! It works very well!
Love this! Freedom can not be caged for sure!
I loved the imagery.
A bit of cash would be nice too though 🙂
“…and I will knot my heart with yours.” — excellent
This is beautiful, in sound, mood and words.
Oh this is a proposal most earnest and sweet. I have a midlevel visual going in my mind before I saw the lovely accompanying art. Beautiful.
The heart’s calling laid bare and true.
but whisper wind
and wrap me to your life
Yes, there’s a way of doing it to make it successful! Not to be forced on but mental persuasion!
Love those last two lines.