Pause — before

Today, we paused
before decay as sun
broke through
the settling haze
to glace the grass in gold.

Today the sky was lemonade,
paled, an air diluted thin,
with cotton candy brushstrokes
in its pledge for later
rain and scent of soil.

Tree Tops and Sky, Guildford Castle By J.M.W. Turner

The word is sky today when De hosts the Quadrille at dVerse.

September 21, 2020

32 responses to “Pause — before

  1. This is absolutely stunning, Bjorn! I love the image of “the sky was lemonade, apologetic, paled, an air diluted thin, hesitant with cotton candy brushstrokes.” 😀

    • Beautiful a good way to pause! I enjoyed reading your post very much and I would like to invite you to follow my blog to, thank you so much and I wish you much success 🌹🤗

  2. This is really beautiful, Bjorn. I love the phrase ‘…as sun
    broke through
    the settling haze
    to glace the grass in gold.’
    Iambic heptameter? I love the childhood imagery of a ‘lemonade sky’ and ‘cotton candy brushstrokes’ too!

  3. I like how you have incorporated pauses in your quadrille,
    Björn, using punctuation and a line break, and the alliterative phrase ‘glace the grass in gold’. I also love the way you have given your sky tastes of lemonade and cotton candy, and that wonderful scent of soil.

  4. I especially love the second stanza….that lemonade sky with cotton candy brushstrokes promising rain to come…..kind of like a child saying pretty please with sugar on top…which is a common saying in the US only here the sky is apologizing with cotton candy….:)

  5. I like the “sly” rhyming in the first stanza. Also great concept of an apologetic lemonade sky with cotton candy brushstrokes of promise for rain later. Beautiful imagery.

  6. This is something I need to share with my fellow writers here at dVerse. I so enjoy reading the work that you create and post, and am genuinely honored to be embraced as a part of this community of poets. May we all find healing in these challenging times. And as a true aquarian love child, and also a proud flower child of the 60’s, who truly believed then we would some day change the world to be a better place for all, and still believes that we might yet do it — I wish each of you peace, health, and love. Write on!
    PS — love the “live” OMN events, Kudos!

  7. A great choice of the Turner image reflected in your verse – For me, the second stanza particularly works well – lemonade sky – both pale and apologetic and candy sweet – it’s like going for a walk in Turner’s masterpiece. Transporting.

  8. The breaking through the haze reminded me of the skies we have seen here lately. Lemonade is soothing and reminds me of hot summer days but, sadly fall arrives tomorrow.

  9. I can remember as a youngster lying down in a grassy field and being entertained by the sky changing before me and perhaps then I realised how beautiful the world really was. Great poem Bjorn.

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