I trace my finger along the teeth of my Yale key. The metal is tarnished; yellow and spotted with verdigris showing its lack of use.

You were always home to greet me when I came home; asking:

“Can you guess what’s for dinner?”

“Meatloaf”, I always replied.

I was the breadwinner until the day I came home with a  pink slip in my hand.

I never thought you could spend too much time with someone you love, but it’s easier to love than being friends I only realize when it is over, said and done. 

It was a time and there was never enough of it, but we wasted what little we had on petty details; like meatloaf.

Now you are gone and the new tenants will soon arrive.

I slip the key into an envelope with my mother’s recipe for meatloaf and leave.

Today Merill hosts at dVerse Prosery the prompt where we write prose no longer than 144 words that has to include a given sentence from a poem.

“when it is over said and done
it was a time
and there was never enough of it.”

Which comes from the poem “A Time” by Allison Adelle Hedge Coke, You may punctuate as you wish but you are not allowed to change the order of the words or inserting more words.

August 17, 2020

28 responses to “Meatloaf

  1. I love the way you started with the key, Björn, tactile and visual, the spots of verdigris are an especially nice touch, and the idea of coming home to someone was a forewarning of something to come. The ending is so poignant.

  2. This is gorgeously rendered, Bjorn! I love how you begin with the image of the key, it’s subtle, poignant and oh so ever arresting! 💝

  3. Meatloaf is a perfect metaphor for life, for so many things. It is one of those simple things we take as “oh, just meatloaf” when it really can be a great meal

  4. Another winner, brother. The prompt is worked in seamlessly. Kudos for finding a humane metaphor, a mundane, yet miraculous piece of prose. I like that you worked dialogue in too.

  5. This is a reflective piece, I ponder how much time is wasted on the little things. Time does have a way of slipping away. I always found meatloaf
    to be a comfort food so it fits in well.

  6. kaykuala

    Meatloaf can well spell satiated cravings fulfilled but matters surrounding it may not matter much in importance. Very true Bjorn!


  7. You’ve made 144 words into quite an epic tale. Very moving, Bjorn. The two central images – the key, the meatloaf – so mundane – that’s what gives them so much weight, I think.

  8. Another great write, Bjorn. Your description of the key illustrating the passage of time, your words illustrating well out preoccupation with minor things never realizing our time is precious. (What’s more, you left me with a craving for meatloaf!)

  9. What a single key can unlock! There is so much here. I think it is easier to love when you are friends. Proverbs 17:17 “A friend loves at all times…” Pondering that very thought recently. And yes, time is wasted on the petty.

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