this sluggish sea
in monochrome conundrum —
I drift without direction,
watch the seamless shift
from sea to sky —
I’m weary worn.
the thunder drum-rolls
rocks my boat —
I’m more alive.
Today at dVerse Quadrille is hosted by Mish, and the word is drum. I found some good words containing “drum” that I liked to use and I think many of us feeling a bit the same… being lost at the listless sea at the moment.
June 15, 2020
I love what you did with the prompt word in this quadrille, Björn; what greats words doldrums and conundrum are – and all those ‘-less’ words.
Thank you… I just searched for words containing drum… and they seemed to fit together.
Beautiful. I’m glad you searched for “drum” words. I was going to include them but decided to let others do their own creative homework. All the “less” words resonate in your poem, especially ‘spineless’ as it feels to me like the days are a bit wimpy, staying home, and the fear of certain interactions, etc.
Oh, I love the ‘feel’ of this poem, as if I am on a rocking boat!
I like the description of the thunder’s drum rolls rocking the boat.
Nice sense of place, with a dramatic turn at the even. We all feel more alive when the thunder rolls.
I like your take on the prompt. Your words really work well!
Fantastic wordplay in this one, Bjorn! 😀 I especially love; “watch the seamless shift from sea to sky — sleepless,spineless, listless.” Inspired! 💝
I echo Glenn’s comment. Love that turn and connect with being stuck in windlessness. Skillful word weaving.
I love the beat of this (pun not intended). The groups of “-less” words makes it so lyrical. Thank you for the fantastic read.
That would certainly wake one up! Nice!
I luv the rhythm of your verse, Bjorn
That heavy air before the storm…we are caught in it seemingly without end. (K)
I also like the word play in this piece. Lovely quadrille.
Interesting Bjorn, seems we were both weary trying to find that pulse to feel alive.
Great Stuff, BR. I also appreciate those dol- and Conun- drums!..Salute!
Lots to like here (as ever) – the monochrome conundrum – is a beauty, and ‘seamless shift from sea to sky’ – is such a great change of pace – presages the awakening in the last. Terrific stuff
A wonderful building up of coming out of the low times. I like the play on words where less is more.
Shoreless I’m more alive – love that line Bjorn, free-spirited feeling.
Fantastic use of words, well done. 🙂
I like your use of similar words and suffixes. As long as they’re manageable, thunder drum-rolls are always quite welcome
Wonderful response, Björn.
Doldrums. that’s a great word, and very inventive.
This feels like my lockdown!
ooh love your wordplay with ‘drum’ and I felt all at sea …
I think you’re right about how many are feeling right now. I really like the rhythm, rhymes, and repeated sounds in this poem. Doldrums and monochrome conundrum are great choices.
I like the “ thunder drum-rolls” image. If so so evocative! Plus a thunderstorm is simply magnificent.