I came home as usual after work and Lily was gone. Her absence struck me like a wrecking ball. The air inside was bachelor-stale and my mouth filled with bile.
Nauseous I threw up in the sink before I opened an “Old Milwaukee” and sat down listening to a drowsy blowfly bouncing against the kitchen-window.
Trapped like me.
She had kissed me goodbye this morning but didn’t even bother saying goodbye. There wasn’t any note on the kitchen table, no lipstick message on the bathroom mirror, but her wardrobe was empty and she had taken the cash I kept in the cookie-jar.
I don’t know why I was surprised.
Every time love started or ended, you are left within an aching hush, but Lily was different than Kate, Bella and the other sluts.
Smart girl, Lily… she probably found their bodies in the basement.
Today we write Prosery with Merril at dVerse. We have to write in 144 words or less and incorporate the line “I don’t know why I was surprised every time love started or ended”.
March 16, 2020
Definitely dark. The ending was a surprise.
OMG, so far we are batting a thousand for murder… Great story, Bjorn!
Let’s hear it for the dark side! You packed a lot of plot into a few lines. It feels like the last chapter in a Poe short story.
Whoa! I wasn’t expecting that little twist. Great characterisation there, Bjorn.
The opening paragraph is very immediate and puts the reader right into the story. I love the phrase ‘The air inside was bachelor-stale’ and the ‘drowsy blowfly bouncing against the kitchen-window’ is ominous. The short, isolated sentences are very effective and intriguing. You and Lill are on the same dark wavelength today!
Today it’s either dark or sweet… very interesting.
Good one, Bjorn. What an unexpected twist!
Wow–you and Lillian. Dark thoughts brewing away. Well done!
I bet there were a lot of blowflies in that particular house…
That was a twister. Didnt expect it tonend that way
Whoa, I did not see that ending coming!
love that dark twist at the end .. blowfly was a give away!
BUT how dare you besmirch my name, or even imagine murdering me 😉
Oy, two posts in a row with macabre content. Well done!
Well, that’s a surprise!
I agree with Glenn it did have a dark Poe feel to it, especially the twist at the end.
Boy oh boy, Björn! That went in a direction I was not expecting.
Three for three on the dark side of reading tonight! 😳 This was really good.
Oh you know how to spin and catch someone!
That twist at the end enhanced its dark side making it all the more mysterious. Great tale Bjorn!
Whoa! What an ending! Nicely done.
Ah….you too went to the dark side with your twist ending! 🙂 Sympatico!
Really liked these descriptive lines
“sat down listening to a drowsy blowfly bouncing against the kitchen-window. Trapped like me.”
Am I sensing a theme here? Well done!