Blackbird Singing

In morning hear the blackbird singing
and though the skies are dressed grey
the sun behind the clouds is bringing
this morning with the blackbird singing
and can you hear how bells are ringing?
how blessed with smiles of spring this day
of glory with the blackbird singing,
when skies wear silver in her grey.

Frank hosts with us writing triolets with variations today at dVerse. My choice was to break a bit by using feminine rhymes as well as changing the repeated lines a little.

February 27, 2020

19 responses to “Blackbird Singing

  1. Reading your poem got me humming that old Beatles song: Blackbird singing in the dead of night…’ Björn. I can just imagine a blackbird singing against a sky wearing silver in her grey.

  2. Beautifully done! I think I was too literal with the prompt….trying to follow it exactly. When it’s “smudged” a bit, the sense flows beautifully. I especially like the bells ringing as well as the blackbirds singing.

  3. You ain’t afraid of no triolet; smile. This s excellent, brother. I really liked how you reshaped the refrain lines. I’m put in mind of Joni Mitchell;
    There’s a crow flying
    Black and ragged
    Tree to tree
    He’s black as the highway that’s leading me
    Now he’s diving down
    To pick up on something shiny
    I feel like that black crow
    In a blue sky.

  4. Glad you’ve found a hint of Spring, Bjorn. May the blackbirds and bells be harbingers of Spring to come!

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