The serpent moon drowns
in the words,
whispered
too hushed to be heard;
she dies in the shadows
of ink from the pen
he had drained;
while tying his pains
into verse;
and as darkness descends,
he sobs —
relieved from the weight
that left with her light.
Dark Days by Damien Hirst
Today Grace hosts the last OLN for this, year at dVerse. Your opportunity to link a poem of your own. Come join us.
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December 12, 2019
Björn Rudbergs writings 
excellent poem.
“The serpent moon drowns
in the words,
whispered”
the imagery in the entire piece is stunning.
Gosh Bjorn – such a direct, stark yet somehow redeeming piece… Such a powerful piece of writing.
Silent witness and taker of pain. I wonder where she leaves it along her path in the sky? Beautiful poem. Moon and Poetry are vital intimates in healing and every other thing…
This poem is so intensely written, Björn, and is very Scandinavian with its dark days and darker nights. I don’t mind darkness too much, but after a while it can become depressing. The lines that got to me are:
‘she dies in the shadows
of ink from the pen
he had drained’
and
‘relieved from the weight
that left with her light’.
My first encounter with a “serpent moon”, grand word-smithing here. I liked the line /she dies in the shadows of ink from the pen he had drained/.
she dies in the shadows
of ink from the pen
he had drained;
while tying his pains
into verse;
…… this is reminiscent of how I approach
my writing. Love the transition from dark to light
I just read your powerful poem… and the comments are closed.. I really wanted to leave something… it’s such a powerful poem
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A very powerful write Björn, especially those last lines ‘ relieved from the weight that left with her light’
May this season bring you Joy and Peace!
Such a powerful poem. Brought tears to my eyes! ❤️
I’ve been there myself and you captured it beautifully.
I love that serpent moon, and such a beautiful contrast of darkness and light.
Fabulous wordsmithing here, Bjorn! ❤️ I love; “she dies in the shadows of ink from the pen he had drained; while tying his pains into verse.”
relieved from the weight
that left with her light.
This is heart-rending. Like you gulp after reading it.
while tying his pains
into verse;
and as darkness descends,
he sobs —
relieved from the weight
that left with her light.
– Great lines. This poem is very poignant.
I love these line Bjorn, most of all, While tying his pains into verse.
I like your description of being relieved from the weight when darkness came.
The serpent moon is such a vivid image. Darkness coiling into the deepest dark. (K)
ha The Serpent Moon – the serpent has been showing up in many ways the last few days. One might think the moon would shed some layers of light upon the darkness.
You are a wordsmith. No doubt. A great read.
Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.