One last service

On his deathbed, Malcolm pondered the joys in his life: quail’s egg, lark-tongues, caviar and Kobe-beef washed down with Chateau Chéval Blanc.

Both ruthless and fortunate, he left in his wake swindled business-partners and mistresses dumped for bodies turning limp.

His pale whale-like body reflected his diet; in need of assistance folding flesh into his Permobil.

He rang, and noiselessly his staff appeared, the young masseuse, his chef, the butler and his footmen.

He needed one final service.

“Relieve me of my wealth to push me through the needle’s eye.”

Malcolm died, signing the papers condemning his servants to hell.

© Jean L. Hays

Needles(s) to say I thought out of the box here, thinking of the quote “it is easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle than for a rich man to enter the kingdom of God”. I am not sure it will help Malcolm

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October 23, 2019

50 responses to “One last service

  1. Excellent social commentary, Bjorn, and so well-told. That’s got to be a drawing of Malcolm after the story. Froggie never looked so unhealthy!

  2. Strongly written. Malcolm’s life in the poem, very clear and emotional.
    Malcolm satisfies his lusts of the flesh in all manner but has no
    balance within. So he dies totally empty.


  3. No one will know if Malcolm could enter the eye of the needle, for sure his staff would bless him for leaving a lot of wealth behind for them. They will not be held responsible for the way this wealth was acquired.

  4. It’s sad that the joys in his life were associated with food and wine and not with the richness of relationships. You described well an indulgent, selfish man to the end. Exceptional story!

  5. Great take on the prompt, Bjorn. Your picture of a man lost to greed is a compelling one. Though I suspect Malcolm has rather missed the point – surely he’s more likely to pass through that needle if he’d been kind during his life, thoughtful and empathetic to those ageing mistresses? He seems like a bad man right to the end. Well told indeed

  6. I recognise the biblical reference to an old semitic aphorism, what a creative way to take an insider view of life and wealth and the truth of the saying.

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