When midnight moonlight spills its river
in our lake where from your arrow,
freshly picked from Cupid’s quiver
maimed my heart and tainted marrow
infected with your lust and burning.
My truelove: lie again, abstain and stay
to never leave me lonely — yearning.
Venus and Cupid by Jean-Honore Fragonard
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Beautiful rhyming and nice take on the prompt! 🙂
Gorgeous, gorgeous rhyme and rhythm here, B.
Wow. Love this one Bjorn!
I love the rhythm here and your poem is so romantic!
Very nice sound.
Going start calling you DJ Bjorn, for Don Juan, for you are a Romantic of the old school, and I dig it.
Thank you for the Fleetwood Mac, Björn, and for the wonderful rhyming in this quadrille. I also love the alliteration and imagery in ‘midnight moonlight spills its river’.
Love the rhyming as others have said. Also like the use of the word “maimed” — to me that says the heart has been permanently affected by this lover. Not broken…which is somehow more permanent without hope…but here you say “maimed” and that means it goes on but affected. “Stay to never leave me lonely.” I feel hope here.
The rhythm reminded of Longfellow—Then the little Hiawatha, Learned their names and all their secrets… He had a quiver full of arrows too probably.
Love rhyme and rhythm of this. Impressive write.
These words to me are key: “lie again, abstain” which suggest it’s a mirage but a mirage is better than nothing. It’s a beautiful quadrille.
One of your best, I think. The internal rhyme, the meter, and sentiment are lovely.
this is totally quivery 😉
I think my heart is quivering 😉
Nice quadrille 🙂
I really enjoyed the rhyme and alliteration in this.
I love the rhyme and love in your words.
Seriously exquisite! Swoon
Ah! Right to the heart!
I love “midnight moonlight spills its river.”
beautiful 🙂
Beautiful!
I really like; “maimed my heart and tainted marrow”. It really resonates with how being deeply betrayed can feel.
Erotically evocative!