It should have been Eileen’s wedding — not her funeral.
After the guests had left Roberto went up to her room starting the healing-process.
The wedding dress still in its wrapping. Graduation photos, her diplomas and computer.
Every dream had been within her grasp.
He opened her desk-drawer, sifting through his daughter’s secrets.
The pink notebook with every habit listed.
The syringe and spoon and even a tourniquet.
So much has changed, he remembered how she cried when having her measles-shot..
Finally Roberto had something to do, because inked on the back of her notebook were the dealer’s contact details.
The image made me think of drug paraphernalia, the white powder on the spoon in particular.
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June 12, 2019
A sad tale all too real…
Alas… it’s been way too common
A story of revenge begins… A grim scene but appropriate to the prompt.
every end is a new beginning….
Thoroughly chilling. Such a bitter moment to have replaced what should have been one of the happiest.
I just heard of a girl overdosing right after her exam – this is a disaster
So sad, all too common these days. Working in a hospital one sees so much. They’re gone too soon. If only they could see how much they were loved. Beautifully penned.
Drug overdoses kills more than traffic accidents…
Yes. I noticed the unusual surface of the spoon too, but left it out of the story. Wish Roberto had found the pink notebook earlier.
I think this is what every parent wishes for .
I have me a feeling that the dealer is going to ‘receive’ one deal he didn’t bargain for. …
I think so too
A emotionally charged piece with, I think, a chilling conclusion on the horizon. Well done.
I hope for his own sake that he goes to the police with the contact details.
That would definitely be a logical solution. I hope Roberto is thinking with a clear head.
At this point, he needs a purpose to cling to. This could be the beginning of something big. Maybe pulling down a drug empire. Aside from what next, your story is a parent’s worst nightmare.
I wrote this earlier…. and I heard a story of a young girl committing suicide by overdosing on Fentanyl…
Such a sad story, it is so believable, which made it hit home.
Unfortunately it’s very believable these days
eerily what many parents would like to do!
I think it’s what you want to do, but maybe not what you should do.
good point ..
He has a purpose to help him down the path of healing and hopefully find some justice. Great story, Bjorn!
Yup… but maybe he needs to get in contact with law enforcement
Great take on the prompt. I am surprised more parents don’t take revenge.
I think many people understand that revenge will not make you a happy person in the end.
Very sad, then tragic. I hope Roberto doesn’t take the law into his own hands and ends up ruining his own life too.
I think that he will get in contact with law enforcement
Having something to do can be so important in those circumstances
Yup… you just have to find the purpose that is good for you.
Roberto may be taking on more than he can handle. The dealer is often just the tip of an iceberg. Brilliant.
Rosey invited me to lunch!
Maybe he doesn’t really care…
That’s a story that stirs so many conflicting emotions. Any death through illegal drugs is a tragedy, but the circumstances here make it heart-breaking. Well written, Bjorn.
I think it’s a tragedy that too many have to see… alas the same day I heard about a young girl who committed suicide with fentanyl patches.
Björn, your poem is beautifully written and carries this tragedy
in its verses. Step by step. How does anyone cope with such
a loss and how tragic that these drugs are so easily available.
There are so many layers of tragedy…. including all those “respectable” persons who have made money from it.
That’s a beautiful story, if tragic. This would be a great start to a revenge movie.
Revenge and recovery
Tragically commonplace nowadays, Bjorn.
You have an extra ‘h’ in the last line.
Thank you… now it’s corrected…
no matter what happens it doesn’t look like there’ll be a happy ending.
I think it never is… simply accepting and go on I suspect.
Is Roberto now going to hunt down the drug dealer?
I don’t know… let’s just hope that he let the police do their job
Though the story is grim, you told it brilliantly.
Thank you… it’s a story that is way too common
So sad and so real. Well told!
Thank you… it’s a story that should be told
A powerful story, Bjorn, and good writing. There would be no more dangerous adversary than a bereaved father with the drug dealer’s contact information. —- Suzanne
I don’t know… it depends what the father decides to do in the end.
That dealer had better watch his back!
Many times the dealers are just another junkie… wonder if it helps.
I felt the sad emotion in this and the need for revenge. this is a situation that is repeated far too often – who do you blame? The blind eyes of the rich!
There are those getting rich on the people with habit… both in the “legitimate” and the criminal world
This is heartbreaking. I hope her dad finds the murderers who supplied her and deals with them appropriately. Use your imagination.
Yup… but most likely the dealer is a poor junkie just like the daughter… the murders are higher up in the supply chain.
So sad and so real. Beautifully written and I also see a dark murder story evolve.
Could be… though I prefer the masterminds behind the dealer are the ones to pay the prize
Oh, this is sad. I liked the irony of how the narrator mentioned that she had hated to get injections and how times had changed–even though they changed in a dismal way.
Once you have overcome the fear of injections you have crossed the final border.
I think that’s true.
Good story. I like the way it unfolds and the juxtaposition of the wedding and the funeral. Very well done.
It’s a sad juxtaposition… but alas it could happen.
Oh no. This is terribly sad. But the start of something more. Hope he gets the dealer and goes John Wick on his ass
I hope he gets the dealer’s dealer too.
Such a sad story, but at least there’s a chance of some justice with those contact details. You’ve shown Roberto’s grief and the pain of his memories so well.
I have seen so many cases … and heard of them too
This was a brilliant take on the story, so economically told, so well structured. Heartbreaking and yet could be the start of a revenge thriller. Well done Bjorn
I think this is a tale that happens over and over…. maybe that’s why they are possible to tell in a few words.
A sad tale presaging an awful revenge I think
I love how you made this vintage looking photo modern. I felt her father’s pain and his revenge begin to brood.
I see what you saw in this photo. What to do – call dealer, call cops? When you want revenge so badly at the moment of your hurt, you need to take a step back. Good one, Bjorn!