Sense of you

Sense, sweet sense and you —
You immense suspense
of innocence
You, my scent
of myrrh and frankincense,
come dance with me,
commence gyrations,
sting vibrations,
be obscene on me,
my senseless queen,
design,
with fool of me,
between today and later
more and ever more
of keen unseen sensations.
Sense, sweet sense and you.

Assuerus Falls in Love with Esther – Assueres adamavit Esther (Esther 2:17) by Salvador Dali

Sensation… I played a little with rhymes and came up with something for Marian at toads. I will also link up to Poetry Pantry tomorrow.

38 responses to “Sense of you

  1. What a beautifully sensual write! And, yes, I see that you enjoyed playing a bit with rhymes. I like the way ‘keen unseen sensations’ rolls across my tongue!

  2. kaykuala

    come dance with me,

    commence gyrations,
    sting vibrations,
    be obscene on me,

    Sensed a lot of movements and mobility in this provocative episode
    implying a vigorous and active person

    Hank

  3. I love the way the scent, the vibrations and obscenities are sandwiched between the repeated line: ‘Sense, sweet sense and you’, Björn, and the lyrical rhyming in the lines:
    ‘You immense suspense
    of innocence
    You, my scent
    of myrrh and frankincense’.

  4. Oh this is wonderfully sensual! ❤️ I especially love “You, my scent of myrrh and frankincense, come dance with me.” 🙂

  5. In this painting by Dali Esther looks rather alarmed by the king’s advances – as she should be. Queen Vasthi wasn’t treated too well either. He was a lecherous old man!

      • This sent me off reading up about her properly. Thank goodness for the internet. Some argue the book on Esther is a historical novella; not Biblical fact. Written from the pov of the king, I arrive at the lines ” … design,
        with fool of me, …”
        illustrating your intention. A subtlety that passed me by at first read.

  6. Those holy scents mixed with carnal delights give me the feeling that the subject knows there is a transgression going on with this congress, but they have lost their sense in the headiness of it all.

  7. I do love the internal rhymes… immense suspense … myrrh and frankincense… very playful, enticing and hypnotic even.

  8. By the time I got to “be obscene on me”, my heart was pounding so heart that I had to take a few breaths. Wow. I love the way this poem invites all the senses to dance together, how the dance turns into a powerful circle where speaker says to subject, “From beginning to end, this is all about you (and me, too) because of how you make me feel.”

  9. Right there in the middle: “be obscene on me”

    That line! Oh, the possibilities! Let me count the ways! 🙂

  10. This is marvelous! That play between heightened sense and nonsense, each feeding the other–amazing!

  11. Love is either an obsessive compulsion or a sweet lullaby. It doesn’t matter which as in either case it hurts so much when it ends.

  12. The word play in this is fab – and insisted upon being read aloud. The last 2 lines, in particular, are splendiferous..

  13. Nice and sensuous sensations to the senses, Bjorn. The lines, “gyrations, sting vibrations, be obscene on me, my senseless queen, …” certainly fit your picture of Esther and King Xerxes fine. I am assuming that it is an etching.
    ..

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