The moon is shy tonight,
I shiver darling
let me in
skin me slowly
with an utmost care,
break my armor
even when I cry,
let me climb your tower
let me lie beside you
let me darling,
the morning find us bare.
For Lilian at dVerse, write a poem including the word shed, also linked to the Tuesday Platform at toads.
January 22, 2018
Oh Bjorn! You can write the most romantic sensuous poetry! This is glorious.
I do like your rhyme scheme. The last one seems just right. But please, it’s ‘let me LIE beside you’ not lay, unless it was an egg 🙂
Ha.. yes yes… thank you. I will correct.
The verb to lie is all over the place, it’s so irregular. It’s easy to get all the lie lay laid lain mixed up. I do it myself 🙂
I would lie if say I’m never confused about it too.
Most people are.
What a lovely poem!
I love your romantic poems, Björn, and this one is no exception – it’s exceptional, especially the very sensual: ‘shed me / skin me slowly / with an utmost care’ and ‘later, let / the morning find us bare’.
And thank you for sharing ‘Starry Night’ by Edvard Munch.
I’m a big fan of Edvard Munch… so sad that people only know “the scream”… (I don’t even think it’s his best painting)… if you ever go to Oslo, make sure to visit the Munch museum…
I have noticed you’ve used his work a lot. He did do a wide variety. There’s a mermaid–a decorative arch that he was commissioned to do–that hanging at the Philadelphia Museum of Art. It surprised me when I first discovered it was Munch. There’s a also a drawing (I think) of lovers that’s in the collection online, but not on display.
the use of the words, as verbs – shed me, followed hot on the heels, skin me — add a wonderful depth and dimension – this poem is short, tight and hot for the cold, cold for the hot – offers a delightful frisson for the softly edged song it sings – love it!
tender and intimate, difficult to read with tears in one’s eyes
I like the thought of the shy moon and the slow skinning.
How can anyone resist that offer?
“break my armor / even when I cry”… nice juxtaposition.
First, I love the painting you’ve chosen.
The poem reads like a song: shed me skin me and oh….yes! let the morning find us bare. Beautiful poem.
The ultimate exposure. Do we dare to shed ourselves? Powerful and romantic.
Tres romantique! Yummy.
This is nicely sensuous Bjorn, with some great visuals!
I love the delicate vulnerability here. And I’m holding my breath hoping that the beloved will risk being truly bare too, when even the moon cannot be an extra witness to their rendezvous.
Oooh so romantic and sensual and magical!
Deeply sensual words Bjorn. Very tastefully strung.
The Munch painting is a great pairing for this – same mood.
Very sensual. It amazes me how well you write poetry in your second language. This is an excellent poem with the shy moon and slow skinning…baring your all for your love.
I love the shy moon, and the plea to “break my armor even when I cry.” Beautiful, Bjorn.
I read this a couple of times as I was caught in the beauty and sensuality of the words. (sigh) One of my new favorites.
Ooooooo. This is blush-worthy. So well done.
Sounds like a hot night for sure! Shedding all to the bare necessities!
Ooh, the vulnerability of this sensual and romantic experience is beautiful. I love this: “let me in/shed me/skin me slowly/with an utmost care”.
O oh ooiu, Bjorn. Sensuous.
So very sensual.
This really is a beautiful and sensuous poem. I do not agree that lay should have been replaced by lie especially in a love poem. Lay is more fitting as we don’t want lies when it comes to love!
Munch could have written this! Not screaming but pleading – out in the cold
I think he might have painted it…
This is incredibly sensual! 💜💜💜
A sensuous plea…romantic! Would it be the same if not shivering?
Maybe it would be simmering then 🙂
Sultry and emotionally compelling/naked – a lovely combination.
As tender, honest and romantic as any the 19th century Romantics penned, Bjorn! Beautiful write1
This is so lovely, I had to read it a few times as least.
Lovely and sensual. I like how you use “shed”–the narrator asking “shed me.”
That was a Wow! poem! Loved it.
Björn, this was beautiful! I can’t think of anything better to do when the moon is shy… or any other time.