Black Carnation

This morning is
a black carnation;
slightly bent
it’s dying in
the January drizzle.

I’m tossed
and turned
at the mercy
of the cruel clouds
and have to shawl
before the daylight
crumbles into

bedside pensive

Linked to Sanaa’s prompt at toads.

January 4, 2018

11 responses to “Black Carnation

  1. Such a beautiful, tender and evocative close on this one, Bjorn! ❤️Thank you so much for writing to the prompt 😀

  2. I smiled, Bjorn. Someplace in the either I have an unorthodox bedtime also. I’m going to google the word, ‘shawl’, it is new to me.

  3. kaykuala

    before the daylight
    crumbles into
    bedside pensive poems.

    Has to be hurriedly done before it gets dark. Some situations are imposed with such precisions


  4. I love your economic use of words in this poem, Bjorn. It makes the list words more prominent and I really appreciate how they inform the theme of the poem.

  5. this is extremely evocative Bjorn – it resonates with the absolute dreariness of January – and your use of shawl as a verb is most excellent – startling, refreshing and it adds just the right note of resignation with hope … because oh, how easy it is to despair when spring seems so far away and it seems like all of the old (of the past) is still howling into the new year.

    I think you’ve done an excellent job with the word list – this small poem has incredible impact.

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