The old deck had turned grey, polished by weather, sun and wind, but Sven recoiled as it still stung his feet letting off splinters.
Coming back he understood they had left… leaving him stranded.
He remembered their sunset evenings as he sat down tracing the patterns in the planks.
For Sven nothing had changed.
He still loved Ellie… but she had left, taking Sam with her.
He closed his eyes and letting the sun burn through his eyelids he saw the shadows of Ellie and her sister.
They had been laughing.
Undecided then, he had loved and lost them both.
This picture I remember writing to, and I decided to do a slight rewrite of my old story.
Rochelle keeps us going with Friday Fictioners , always challenging us with new pictures (or old ones as in this case)
December 19, 2018
Nicely rewritten. I like the way you jumped from the deck to Sven’s remorse over two-timing.
It’s so nice to revisit and rewrite the old stories…
lovely and sad
I liked to way you showed us the consequence of his indecision
Should’ve picked on sister and stuck with her.
What did he think was going to happen? Continuing my song theme this week I will quote from “Sisters” – Lord help the mister that comes between me and my sister”. Excellent story.
I’m the eternal optimist, so I think he’ll have them both together. 🙂 All he needs is a sexy pair of boots, and he’ll be a chick magnet again.
As always, I love your name choices. They make me think of Ellie Goulding, Sam Hunt, and Alyssa Milano (who played Sam in Who’s the Boss?). And Sven from Frozen, of course. 😛
like they say, strike while the iron is hot.
He couldn’t decide so they both decided for him… poor fool.
It could have been…
If only he could have settled on one sister…
Procrastination – not only the thief of time but of a potential relationship.
His indecision cost him greatly and now he’s left with the sting of regret. Nicely written!
A harsh penalty for too much love. Choice can be a good thing.His loneliness, well-deserved, permeates this piece.
Written so well, carved out of memory.
I did a reprise this week too – love yours X
Indecision has cost many a person their chance at love. And those splintered feet don’t sting as badly as a splintered heart.
Yeah, expecting the sisters to share might be asking a bit much.
being between two sisters was always going to be dicey
Sven had loved Ellie and Sam. Did they leave him or he ended their lives, that is why mention of the deck stinging his feet?
No good came of being indecisive. Looks like he lost it all.
Better luck sampling outside the gene pool me thinks… Nice write..
Typical, an emotional plaything to women’s cruelty.
It was good to be able read the first story, which I enjoyed the most.
The first thing I thought of was the song lyric, “She won’t do it but her sister will.” Poor Sven. Maybe he can marry twins next time. 🙂
Sad & beautifully written.
Someone said: For greed all nature is too little.
Good story of a foolish man.
Bird in hand!
Nicely written. Especially liked this line ” sunset evenings as he sat down tracing the patterns in the planks.”
Two timing got him nowhere. nicely done.