Laburnum and rain

It wasn’t the rain
that evening in June,
but the glare of laburnum,
and his arms
with your laughter.

I watched
you move closer;
while closing your eyes.

It wasn’t the rain
soaking your blouse
but the reek
of his finger
touching your cheek.

Man and woman by Edvard Munch.

Today it’s Quadrille again at dVerse. Kim hosts and the word is rain. A Quadrille is simply a poem in exactly 44 words not including the selected word.

May 21, 2018

47 responses to “Laburnum and rain

  1. I feel his despair. Ugh. Is the Munch piece a woodcut? I love it. Pairs perfectly with the poem.

  2. I love your poems because you create these whole little worlds with just a few words — but also because you’re always teaching me something new about poetry. I’m going to try to work “quadrille” into a sentence in your honor today. 🙂

  3. I love the ‘glare of laburnum’ – we have some in our garden – which suggests something noxious, and the ‘the reek of his finger’ suggests all sorts of things. If all the Quadrilles are like this one, this evening will be steamy, Bjorn!

  4. A great write, I love how you use the ‘the glare of laburnum’ here, which was always a symbol for poison

  5. This is excellent and what you write gives so much power to what’s between the lines! And great piece drawn out of the Munch woodcut

  6. Love the emotions portayed in this poem, Bjorn. Such a strong vibe of jealousy and pain coupled beautifully with “the glare of laburnum.” 💖

  7. Powerful voice here, very effective with that “reek of his finger”….
    You made me look up “laburnum”.

  8. Wonderful! Love the nuanced layers that are delicious – to say nothing of intriguing. The kind of poem that – if one lingers, for a time – will lead you in, yet another, direction.

  9. “the reek / of his finger” — that’s great. In the eyes and mind of the watcher, even mere touch reeks. Nice job.

  10. kaykuala

    Yellow flowers despite being poisonous can still be beautiful when in bloom. Yes, good choice Bjorn!

    Hank

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