Murmur me with rivers,
shiver leaves with breeze,
ease yourself in subtle trance
dance me gently, sway —
play me with your fingertips,
lip me, lick me crazed
daze my senses blue
you and me be moon,
shown the dazzling skies
crying rivers. Loved.
Women at the riverside by Paul Gaugain
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Ooooh, this is so beautiful, Bjorn. I love your verbs, which are perhaps my favorite element of a poem. Now I want to write something with Valentine’s Day–something this romantic.
Murmur me with rivers – that is strikingly beautiful! The Gaugain is a perfect fit for this poem.
I like the echos of songs in this one. (K)
Beautiful write
Oh, my:
“lip me, lick me crazed”
A beautiful Quadrille, Bjorn, and I love the Gaugin painting, too! Very sensual.
Just a great opening line and a simply beautiful poem.
Spoken with the soul of a poet!
“shiver leaves with breeze” That’s what this poem does. Leaves one shivering in anticipation
Oh this is a sensuous one indeed! Love your verbifying here, Bjorn. Beautifully writ!
I like your inverted verbing here, it works really well to create a magical, sensuous mood.
I’ve noticed you do this a lot, Bjorn, it’s your hallmark. You must be a true romantic at heart.
Wonderful.
beautiful from first line to last. Think I’ll read this out loud.
This sizzles with passion! The first line captivates.
This is amazing. Especially some of the middle lines. You know, this time around, though, I misread it as saying “Erase yourself,” which makes it all the more interesting to me.
Bjorn erotica! So romantic!
“Murmur me with rivers”.. now that is stunning!!💖
Love your tight rhythms, and the yearning in your voice!
Damn Bjorn, this is one hot poem. Just love it!
Oh that’s right, duh! I forgot it’s almost Valentine’s Day. Romance, man, I almost totally missed it. Thanks for saving me. Got to get out and find those flowers and candy
Yeah, it’s a good one.
I liked the phrases “shiver leaves with breeze” and “subtle trance”.
oh i was lost in the gentle trance of your words. super!
This has a Song of Solomon sensuality to it, childlike. I like, “you and me be moon”.
Luscious poem..
This one really needs to be read aloud to catch all that tight internal rhyme. Nice!
Beautiful.
The rhythm and words makes one feel like swaying with the poem as it is being read.
entrancing movement to this super sensual poem
This is a new “voice” for you, I think. Nice.
A poem full of heart. Quirky and soulful.
You had me at “river”
In fact, you had me to the end.
Wonderful.
Ooo la la! Such a frisky poem! Love it! 🙂