My knight, I might let you scale my tower but,
it’s easy just to let you slip and break your neck.
You might be another hand-
some man, but I think you talk too much.
You have a choice remaining silent, but
anything you say may and will be held against you.
I can be your judge and firing squad.
I can rope you to the axeman’s block.
Because, my rippling hair is mine to dye
or use for ladder or for noose, you can’t choose.
Hush, my knight, goodnight. I’d rather sleep alone
than become another crown of yours.
Woman with long hair by Man Ray
Kerry have chosen the picture to write a poem for at toads. My choice was to keep this to the rules of a drabble meaning that it has exactly 100 words. I will also link up to Poetry Pantry tomorrow morning.
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November 4, 2017
Standing ovation, Sir. Bravo.
I absolutely love this sassy and fiery side to Rapunzel!❤️ Especially; “Hush, my knight, goodnight. I’d rather sleep alone than become another crown of yours”..❤️
Ah, I like this modern day feminist Rapunzel…..not willing to let down her hair on demand. I guess SHE told him. Smiles.
This is one Rapunzel who know what she wants. Is any prince brave enough to scale her tower?
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A fun read – rendered in a drabble, no less. This post – pix, poem and note – is very cool … evoking a – ‘poet humor’ – smile.
Nice work with the Drabble and the lady’s message, B. Love this photo, and you have inspired me to try my hand at some poetry.
Excellent poem – could have been written by a strong woman. I love your voice in this Bjorn. It actually is universal. Great write!
Hush, my knight, goodnight. I’d rather sleep alone
than become another crown of yours
It’s good to tell off all the hustlers that they have no place in her heart!
Hank
Ha! Well played sir.
namaste
JzB
How could I resist the title? The narrative voice is very appealing, definitely one more fitting for the modern age of storytelling.
Sometimes dark side is an absolute necessity, to survive, to be such a Rapunzel, specially these days. “You might be another hand- / some man,” Love this line break. Wow!
Oh dear what happened to love at first sight and shining knights rushing to the rescue of the hapless maiden in distress… love the modern angle Bjorn!! High time, dear Rapunzel!
.. he’d probably go broke paying for her foils, detanglers, and conditioning treatments anyway, may have been a lucky escape.
I love your modern Rapunzel, Bjorn, and that she can decide whether to let the knight scale her tower or let him slip and break his neck! I especially love the lines:
‘I can rope you to the axeman’s block.
Because, my rippling hair is mine to dye
or use for ladder or for noose, you can’t choose’.
A haunting poem
A case of: get out of my hair you mere man! The choices are all hers. Refreshing.
Rapunzel is a quite an assertive lady….in control of her life. I love her voice!
Yeah the fairy tale did cross my mind but im swayed by Christmas tis November
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much love…
not one drivel in your drabble – I like the way you have give Rapunzel a strong voice instead of her silent waiting fairy tale
Good for her. We need more strong women, unwilling to become a crown – so easily discarded. Choice is something I talk about to my kids often. Our choices often dictate where we will end up.Of course it implies that we have to take responsibility for those choices, which many don’t really care for. But in that there is strength.
Wow Bjorn, you never fail to amaze with your creations. I liked this twist on the tale of Rapunzel. Very intriguing. thank you.
Oh, WOW! I feel sorry for the narrator! This is an impressive write. Those closing lines zing!
By the end of this one, I found myself trying to snap my fingers and do that defiant whipping of the neck move (two things I’ve never been able to manage, by the way). Love the speaker’s attitude and completely second it. Also the effect of the line break in the second stanza made me grin with delight–just brilliant.
Hi Björn, what a great take on the image, superb!
O my! That was so fierce!
I like your poem based on a fairy tale!
Oh Bjorn what a timely write and as a woman I love what you have written….yes my choice. A great twist on Rapunzel especially if she was alive today!
Timely as ever, Sir Björn.
Awesome! All that talk doesn’t get you anywhere be your Knight or simply male. Love it!
Ha, what a great take on the picture prompt!
A bold declaration – a manifesto of wonderfully clear and direct facts. Sassy and speaks of the flip side of intolerance of objectification, and the appreciation and acceptance of self. Biting and sharp. Loved it – so many lines simply worded but with amazing imagery. Just gorgeous.
I don’t think he should trust her!
Now that’s a woman with attitude! I love the hair as ladder or noose.
Ah, Rapunzel prevails. She is in charge of her fate. Wonderful!
I bet he decided to seek a different lover with short hair and less attitude. But I like her assertiveness, wish I were a little more like her. Good writing Bjorn.
A dark Repunzal indeed. Although it makes me think of original fairytales way back when. I bet there is a good chance a knight/prince would climb up,into her tower so he could sleep with her, probably against her will, so it’s hard to trust guys who want her to “Let Down Her Long Hair.” She can also only go off of what they say so strangling some jerk who wants to hurt her control her etc. could be justified, I get it. Self defense. On the other hand, locked alone in that tower she could be going Bat crazy. Lol
Love her attitude. Take that!
woooooah! this is amaaaazing!