Jewels in the dark

· by · in free verse, poetry, Real Toads. ·

The sparkle in my eyes —
were like jewels wildy cold.
I was the mineral, the rules
that turned your alabaster
into putty for my hands.
I fell in love with you —
and once you’ve left I saw
how eyes can only shine
in presence of your light.

Pygmalion by Franz Stuck

At toads Kerry wants to have a poem in less than 10 lines inspired by the last lines of James Wright’s poem “The jewel”. I will link up to Poetry Pantry tomorrow morning as well.
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July 17, 2017

28 responses to “Jewels in the dark”

  3. Redheads. Are they the archetype of muses? And how that pale nakedness can burn with darkness — well, that’s why we worship dark emeralds.

  5. That William is a smooth liar. 😉

    Tell him I really like the third line. It’s unexpected and interesting. And this is a very sweet poem.

  7. Wondering if this is really love….with the sparkle like jewels wildly cold. Quite a contrast from the last two lines which DO seem to express the warmth of love.

  12. Oh, I particularly like that last line! You’re waxing Metaphysical. 🙂

  16. You have really dug deeply through the emotional recesses of love or maybe even obsession.
    Thanks Bjorn.

  19. There’s a nagging thought that the “wildly cold” may have had something to do with her leaving. A passionate read, Bjorn!

  25. A lovely, sensual piece brilliantly book-ended with a linked starting and closing couplet.

  26. I think I would classify this as a “too late” poem: I didn’t realize until too late how much you meant to me.

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