Call me back
my love. Oh please
come please me
with an echo.
When I whisper —
come whisper back.
Please. please me
with your echo.
But if I’m silent
remind me please
to please you
with an echo,
and another echo.
Echo please.
Écho by Alexandre Cabanel
Today it’a Quadrille on dVerse. De hosts with the word echo.
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May 8, 2017
Björn Rudbergs writings 
LOVE. A perfect word to use more than once, and sooooo beautifully.
“Call me back,” and “But if I’m silent” are such lovely lines. This poem feels like bouncing in the waves of a ripple. Soft, quiet, and moving.
The joy of an echo, of response and more…nice expression of feeling.
Great use of echoes in your Quadrille, Björn! I love the way you’ve changed them slightly in each stanza. It has a pleasing ebb and flow to it.
Love the echo, echo of your poem Bjorn ~ Very clever presentation ~
The echo of love spirals beautifully through this quadrille :o)
The repetition is like delicate brush strokes.
I like how you used the myth and the essence of echo you create in words.
I like the idea of asking the lover to ask you for the same think you are asking her.
Such passion such longing in this, Bjorn! Beautifully executed!❤️
This reminds me of a line from one of my favorite Bruce Springsteen songs: “I’ll wait for you. If I should fall behind, wait for me.”
A terrific & romantic Q44, sir, transferring the prompt into both action & concept. Your cleverness is not harnessed by your perfect brevity; smile.
A whole lot of pleasing going on! Delightful.
I love the intimacy of these whispers.
An all-round clever bit of writing.
Lots of pleasing echoes makes for a romantic dialogue between lovers. Lovely, Bjorn!
The repetition is so effective!
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Such tenderness repeated. Love this one, Bjorn.
Ugh, the story of Echo (the nymph) is so tragic!
I love this take. I think we all want that echo and we often strain to provide it to loved ones in need of its reverb.
if i had to ask my lover this i am assuming he has forgotten all about me or slowly slipping away, then my please would like echoes in a barren desert place – love the repetition of the word echo – sounded like an echo as i read it out loud
I love the way the fractured repetition works. It’s like being surrounded by echoes that create a poem. Clever and lovely!
Ah, waiting for your lover to respond. That moment when it’s her turn to return love. Will she do it or not? It gives great tension to the rhyme
This is beautiful.
Oh those last two words, in plea to Echo herself. These intimate whispers seeking reciprocity are beautifully rendered.
Great use of echo effect in addition to the word itself…the repeated use of both “echo” and “please” is wonderful.
That is all we wish for, I believe, is for love to be echoed back. Lovely, Björn.