“Do you remember how we used to love camping?”
“Yes”.
“Do you remember vistas and how we went exploring once?”
“I do”.
“Do you remember how we loved to gaze at stars?”
“Yup”
“Do you remember how we loved to barbecue with friends?”
“Indeed”.
“Do you remember … “
“I remember the mosquitoes and my fear of snakes. I remember rain and how we froze. I remember sunburns, scrapes and cuts, how bad we slept at night… but most of all I remember how much you longed for television.”.
“So I guess we’ll go to Vegas for vacation once again”.
“You bet”.
Though I love camping myself, I also love comfort, so I can see this happening. I also wanted to do a pure dialogue story. I find dialogue hard, so I hope it works.
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November 30, 2016
Funny how that works… I went from tent, to pop-up tent trailer to trailer and am now a comfort-seeking hotel traveler…No way in hell you could pay me to sleep in a tent again!
We are still in tent, and we love it… but I guess it’s hard to backpack with a trailer.
There is that… 😉
I’m with you, Dale. Roughing’ it is a thing of the past for me.
Yep!!
yeah, I must admit it’s getting harder to sleep on the ground and get back up as I grow older 🙂 Plus my husband and son don’t enjoy it so that kills the fun
I so hear ya…
We do tend to see the past with spectacles of nostalgia, Nicely evoked, Bjorn
Both the bad and the good can be true…
I’m with you on this one. I only camped for one night, and I had my fill that night. It was in the middle of the hay-fever season. I think the wife’s memory is better than the husband’s.
I do love camping in almost every aspect… but I can long for comfort too…
The dialogue works very well and I can relate to this too. I loved camping, backpacking, sleeping under the stars in my twenties and thirties until we discovered the comfort of a cosy cottage where we could bring the dogs :o)
My father used to say that it was fortunate that houses were hollow so you can get inside.
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I love the dialogue.
I love how you showed the subtle attempts to persuade the other person.
I think the suitableness was far from effective.
Must confess I am more of a “glamper” myself. I would be just fine without TV or internet, but I must have a European bathroom. I ain’t squatting over nothing! Excellent story. A limit of 100 words? I’m impressed.
Hundred words is fun for a story… and i do think sitting down instead of squatting is essential…
It not only works, it works well!
Thank you… it was fun to do..
Dialogue is hard. An entire conversation happens inside your head, and it takes a lot of sculpting to make a story take shape. I like the progression you took here. All the steps down memory lane take a turn onto reality street. Nice job.
I tried to visualize them when I wrote the dialogue… and read it aloud to see if it worked… (but that I do with all my texts)
I think the dialogue worked really well too – felt very natural, realistic, like the couple had known each other a long time. Great story – and quite right, no one should have to go camping!
I would love to go camping and so would my wife.
Brilliant that you’re both so keen! Let’s hope you get to go soon and have a wonderful time 🙂
We took the kids camping when we couldn’t afford anything else, and it was fun. Apart from the rain, the mosquitoes, and the long walk to the toilet block!
I actually think it’s fun still…
I always loved camping and then I got older. Not sure how and when it happened, but one day I woke up and decided hotels are nicer than a tent.
I mostly like to wary myself… but last summer we hiked between cabins and it was great.
I love hiking. I was born and raised in Europe in the alps and the legend goes that we are born with hiking boots on our feet and snow shoes. 🙂
I love cabins aren’t they great?
In Sweden and Norway the have a really great system of cabins… no electricity, just wood for heat and gas for cooking…
It’s the same in Austria and Italy. Just wood stoves and lots of guitars -and alcohol. 🙂
Nothing beats food cooked over a open fire, even the dialogue is great.
I prefer outdoor food too… 🙂
I would take the great outdoors any day over a Vegas vacation…the story could read…’Do you remember losing your shirt at the blackjack tables? Do you remember losing our savings at the Roulette table….” nice story
Ha.. I wouldn’t like Vegas either… so I’m with you there. But you never remember what you did in Vegas, do you?
Hell, I don’t remember what I did last weekend…
I think this works well! I use ad to camp, but these days it’s most definitely comfort!
I’m still into camping but comfort is great too…
Dialogue works great. I can sympathise with both sides of the argument here too. Nice one.
I’m in favor of camping… and television i can be without.
Dear Björn,
I love the dialogue in this, not to mention the conclusion. When we were younger we camped a lot. I think I’m over it. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
I still love it… but I do love a bed sometimes also… (preferably not in Vegas though)
I thought the dialogue worked too. And I’m also someone else who now sometimes struggles to see the attraction in camping – and I’ve done a LOT of it, in very wild places, in the past. Mind you, I’d take a tent over Vegas any day.
I would prefer tents in rain to Vegas too…
I have never been camping and have no desire whatsoever to do so. The dialogue reminds me of my wife’s memories of her family camping when she was a child. She hated it then and hates it more now.
Ha.. I have a wife who loves sleeping in a tent.
We love all kinds of camping…tent, pop-up, and now comfort of 5th wheel camper.
For us it’s mostly a tiny tent… cannot carry a camper…:-)
Ah…I admire purists! Would like to do that again. Ever encounter danger with wild animals?
Wild animals in Sweden is limited to some birds… but sure. I have seen the tracks of wolverine in winter, but nothing more.
We met a black bear on hiking trail…glad to have camper shell that night.
I liked the dialogue!
The dialogue worked very well. My husband and I still camp. I love getting all kinds of dirty and not caring then staying in a hotel and getting all kinds of comfy. You caught that feeling in your dialogue.
I prefer the fresh air too… 🙂
Wonderful dialogue, Bjorn. And Vegas? Sure! We had an RV, so we travelled a lot. It was a lot better.
Have only tried RV once with my parents and it was fun… but now i prefer something less bulky.
We had a Winnebago that was way cool for its time. We got it used for about $6000 (this was 1973 or so). Had it through my senior year in high school. I never learned to drive it, though.
Dear Bjorn,
If Mama’s not happy then no one is happy. Vegas sounds like the right choice. Snappy, effective dialogue and a great tale.
Yours,
Doug
I think they ended up not to disagree…
Ha! Sounds like the first person didn’t really want to admit it but they prefer a comfortable holiday too 🙂
I think so too… maybe it was just a devious plot to get to Vegas.
I really like the dialogue, it tells the full story well. And the symmetrical layout of words is visually pleasing too (with the long sentence, short answer, long sentence, short answer…). I always enjoy reading text with a bit of artisitc flair.
Great story!
-Rachel
Thank you, I love to work with the artistic part… 🙂
Hahaha this is the conversation that happens in my house!! Great piece
I’m fortunate not to have it… we are talking about going out for winter camping…
Winter??? Eeeeek 😳
Your dialogue was really effective and flowed naturally. Talk about extremes from tenting to Las Vegas.
Maybe there is a middle way somewhere… like staying at home.
It was fun at the time, signing up to do tent camping again. The food is always great though. It’s best just to visit someone’s campsite, eat supper and go home. That’s my plan.
That should be NOT signing up.
Ha.. Camping food… like charcoaled steak?
Yeah, Las Vegas it is, I’m with them, can’t take the camping option anymore.
I can take Vegas even less… maybe staying at home is the best option
yes it can be harsh out there,
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I guess there are good parts and worse.
If its a conversation between husband and wife, the last line was a punch in the gut!
Nice!
I guess it takes a long relationship to have this conversation.
Great dialogue. VERY realistic! lol
😉 Thank you… I hope they found a middle way between extremes.
Rose-tinted spectacles swiftly removed!
Facing reality can be harsh…but better before than after.
Nice use of dialogue. I find dialogue hard as well, I blame it on my catholic school upbringing all my characters sound too nice and polite and not real or nuanced.
I could never do a dialect, but I think sometimes dialogues are either too “written” or too “casual”.
agreed
Excellent, Bjorn, two speakers, two memories, two points of view, superbly melded together.
Thank you, but maybe in the end there is just one memory…
I think the dialogue worked very well in this. I used to love camping when I was younger but it is hotels all the way for me now!
Thank you… I still love camping many times before Vegas… but a bed can be better than the ground.
Good dialogue, Bjorn. It worked beautifully. My dad went from tent to small summer fishing cottage to larger year-round cottage with conveniences. I think it often has to do with aging. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne
It has do with age but also finance I think…
Hi Bjorn,
Very well done, especially for focusing on the dialogue and taking on that challenge. I agree on the possibility of finding a middle ground in between Vegas and camping. I’m Australian and I prefer a more natural setting to the built up environment. Perhaps in a cabin with a toilet rather than a tent but I would like to try tenting again soon.
xx Rowena
Ha… I prefer tent anytime…
This is great. There go the romantic memories. I like how well they understand each other.