Answer is night —
What’s silver and black —
What’s borrowed from day —
What’s free from delight?
No said the night —
Where are your deeds —
Where is the wolf —-
Where hoots the owl?
Answer: your dream.
Beware said the dream —
Bring me your scream
Bring me your path
Bring me your scowl
If night is the mare
Is daylight a snare —
Is the pillow your noose —
Are you nested in yarn?
Awake — calls alarm.
The Awakening – Night by Mark Toby
Gillena want’s us to write a poem inspired by Answer July by Emily Dickinson at toads, don’t know if I made a fair one, but I had fun writing it. I will also link up to Poetry Pantry in the morning.
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October 22, 2016
I think you did a great job, Bjorn!
Such a treacherous challenge!
You have risen to it admirably.
Oh, what fun! A great little write
This is a great response to a tough tough prompt… quite inspiring to attempt it later today.
I had fun reading it, too. I think you have handled the assignment brilliantly.
This is amazing, Björn! I especially like:
‘Beware said the dream —
Bring me your scream
Bring me your path
Bring me your scowl’.
The last line was like a crescendo of all the action. This was a fun, lively read.
The night, the dream and then in the end….waking call by alarm… That’s a brilliant write, liked it 😃
Stupendous verse, Bjorn 😀
Your poem captures this authentic experience.
I think the night is the day’s poetry.
Very scary! And full of action.
I think night might be kinder than imagination – although that can be fun when it runs wild
I like the rhymes and rhythm of this poem … kind of reminds me of Blake actually … well done.
Wonderfully executed, Bjorn.
beware of dreams, will they ride in on a mare…will the haunting of night scare? I enjoyed this Bjorn
Actually, I like this poem very much, Bjorn. It is a different style than your usual, and I can tell you had fun with it. But it really expresses well the different kinds of thoughts that can float through a person’s mind at night.
Whoa!! good job Björn; luv the process of questioning, reasoning, and conclusions
much love…
You made the perfect one ~~~~
It is what we seek…and what you have given!
For me a great question and answer piece of writing here with a good rhythmic feel. I enjoyed it all, especially the first stanza.
Wow, Bjorn! I’m bowled over by what you did with this poem. It was a difficult prompt (I thought) and you have knocked it out the ball park. I far prefer yours to the original (sorry Emily).
This is so clever and fun. You did a wonderful job with this Bjorn. Love it.
This is a very melodious form – catchy, really. Though, like all clever verse, I suspect there is a lot more to pulling it off so seemlessly, than one might give it credit for, at first pass. Very cool.
Loved the journey from day, through night, and back to morning.
A lot of searching questions and there are always answers pending! That is life in the modern world!
Hank
A fun read!
I loved how the poem galloped along like the nightmare that it becomes.
Thank goodness for that alarm! I like what you did here.
i bet you had fun writing this!
enjoyed the poem!
Night too often isn’t sweet dreams or oblivion. You have expressed so well the nightmare it can bring. It is tough to argue with intangible.
I often feel as though my pillow is a noose, keeping me from sleep!
A wonderful write, Bjorn.